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Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

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0 posted 2003-08-23 09:55 PM

She hopped onto
a cool stainless prep table,
kicked off peppermint pink sandals
and sat, her legs tucked under.

“Make me something?” she asked,
with a smile that soothed like a pacific breeze
against the flush of too many hours
over a white-hot grill.

“Got me a soundtrack?” I winked,
knowing she would.

So she sang me some tunes
while I tossed and sautéed,
topping my glass, steadily
with cool, golden Mer et Soliel.

From glass to lip
to laugh

I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…

watching me.

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

1 posted 2003-08-23 10:06 PM

Glad I caught this one Duncan, it's so beautiful.

Being online not very often I miss a lot of beautiful poetry.

Always like your poems friend.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-08-23 10:09 PM

lol, you and your intelegence. You amaze me more every day. now don't run off again

Or I'll hurt you

insanity is not a crime

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

3 posted 2003-08-23 11:10 PM

What a delightful read....especially those peppermint pink sandals ... darling!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-08-23 11:39 PM

I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…

watching me.

You are such a delight to read....

I know I promised not to gush,
but if it isn't too much trouble,
could you indulge me more??  lol~

Love the mood,
and the way you served up this little taste teaser.

You are not only a lesson in patience,
you make it hard to resist goob~

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

5 posted 2003-08-23 11:50 PM

"I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…"

Beautiful m'friend!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2003-08-24 12:09 PM

with a smile that soothed like a pacific breeze
against the flush of too many hours
over a white-hot grill.

=============================
I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…
=================================

this is up there with some of your best in creating more with less and scene setting.
the lines I highlighted above are cooler than cool.

great write porch puppy...bout time you posted something.

I reread to see if I missed the line telling us she was blonde...then I found it hidden in the imagery....

kicked off peppermint pink sandals

well of course she was.

You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ...
and know my love and my desperation were one and the same.

J.Browne

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

7 posted 2003-08-24 12:14 PM

<<“Make me something?” she asked,
with a smile that soothed like a pacific breeze

From glass to lip
to laugh

I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…

watching me.>>
=======================
hey Duncan...this is very cool...I love the way you tell a story...makes me feel like I'm there too...excellent write!

sp

just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday...

[This message has been edited by snowpants (08-24-2003 12:16 AM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-08-24 12:20 PM

Well, you romantic porch puppy, you....
you know that I can't follow Janet Marie's excellent reply,
so I'll just say that I loved it....and are there more??
I hope so.
By the way, I sure have missed you....

Hugs

Ethel

ljossberir
Member

since 2003-05-04

Posts 81
Ny, USA

9 posted 2003-08-24 12:23 PM

nice reading
gentle and delicate, good stuff for a "heavy" day - and probably also alot more to it than meets the eye. good work!
-matt

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2003-08-24 08:06 AM

Aye..you grabbed Serenity's "watching people watching people" challenge...
and made us smile!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

11 posted 2003-08-24 09:18 AM

Duncan
Well done a delight to read.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

12 posted 2003-08-24 10:08 AM

Hey Dunc, this one is yummy! Dessert must have become an irresistable main course.

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

13 posted 2003-08-24 10:15 AM

Glad I didn't miss this...WOW! I am speechless here.

Still shaking my head...you are sooooo good!

Patricia

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

14 posted 2003-08-24 10:21 AM

This is absolutely amazing.Beautiful and sweet.Your words flow so smooth and they paint such wondrous thoughts.
Crystal

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

15 posted 2003-08-24 02:03 PM

I came back for a second serving.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

16 posted 2003-08-24 11:35 PM

Pink peppermint is a dead giveaway!!
You can fool some of the people some of the time,
but you can't fool a moth, or an angel in disguise.

The firmest friendships are formed with mutual adversity, like steal unites with the fiercest flame. (author unknown to me)

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

17 posted 2003-08-24 11:38 PM

TASTY!!!! ~K~

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

18 posted 2003-08-25 08:47 AM

She hopped onto
a cool stainless prep table,
kicked off peppermint pink sandals
and sat, her legs tucked under

doesn't the health dept have something to say about how you treat surfaces that are used to prepare food??? Here I thought you were a serious professional...
LMAO...

nicely done Dunc... now about that halo???

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

19 posted 2003-08-25 09:10 AM

Duncan - I can only dream about something like this, great write...

BC

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

20 posted 2003-08-25 04:51 PM

Duncan,

You always manage to put a smile in my heart for the day.

ever deep...runs
the wishing well
for fairytale illusions

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

21 posted 2003-08-25 07:20 PM

enjoyed

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

22 posted 2003-08-28 10:57 PM

Her halo doesn't sit quite right when she's looking a gift horse in the mouth.

Yankity yank and whoa!!!

Missing you here, oh dear!!!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

23 posted 2003-08-28 11:18 PM

Why is it always the blondes that get wrote about?

You set the stage and graced it very well..

Susan

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

24 posted 2003-08-28 11:51 PM

Duncan....a sweet write!

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

25 posted 2003-08-28 11:56 PM

I felt her
in some easy corner
of my mind

a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…

You constantly amaze, never disappoint and flatter us so much with excellent poetry like this. TD

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

26 posted 2003-08-29 12:13 PM

whoa! i like!

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

27 posted 2003-08-31 08:33 AM

You've described me so perfectly!

How did you know?

(chuckling)

Good to read you again, Duncan...

~Tier

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

28 posted 2003-08-31 09:50 AM

....it's like watching two people, and feeling their energy, and smiling at the connection they have.... and how it triggers your own memories....very cool read

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

29 posted 2003-08-31 10:01 AM

A perfect moment captured in time, like a photograph.
Sandra

SharaRose
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

30 posted 2003-08-31 12:05 PM

Well if this wasn't the cutest, sweetest thing. Reminds me of the time I worked prepping food at the stainless steal table..and I could just see a picture of this in my mind....this was so sweet, and romantic....soooooooooo cute!!! Loved it!!!!!! Brought back memories of my younger days when I could just hop up on a table, and chit chat sitting indian style. Acting silly, and bein' silly crazy in those younger years. hehe Thanks for the walk back through the memories. Cute one for sure!!

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

31 posted 2003-09-02 06:00 PM

I felt like I was watching a movie, and a dang good one at that! Excellent!

I don't want to know where I am heading, it will spoil my journey.
Carpe' Diem

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

32 posted 2003-09-02 06:15 PM

Excellent Duncan!
Fantastic imagery...much enjoyed the read.
~Hugs~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have the sand in my shoes ~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

33 posted 2003-09-02 07:06 PM

"a sweet indulgence
of simplicity,
with a halo in her pocket…"

~ Ah, ha! An off-duty angel! She better be careful! I got into all kinds of trouble when my halo slipped just a few inches (Into The Bowels of Hell)--but for her to keep hers in her pocket....She has no protection at all against you! lol

Enjoyed your poem!

EA

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

34 posted 2003-09-02 07:43 PM

enjoyed

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

35 posted 2003-09-06 12:51 PM

Oh waiter~ (ringing my bell)
Can I get a side of sighs,
if I trade you for a song to go?

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

36 posted 2003-09-13 05:41 PM

I must say...loved this...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

37 posted 2003-09-13 05:52 PM

Get in here and
mind your manners, puppy...

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