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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-08-23 06:10 PM



Dirty water still gets me clean
leaning towards the sanitised descriptions
of fairytale love

I would square your shoulders
if I saw you, dear reflection

Red lipstick never suited me
eyes too small and lips too full

Didn't deserve this
laid on thick, left to scrape it all off

Have you ever stared at someone for so long
they no longer look the same

Like you've never really looked before
though you've seen them everyday?

I only knew your name, your faith, where your priorities lay
and you never did remember the conversations we'd had.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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eminor_angel
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1 posted 2003-08-23 06:22 PM


"Have you ever stared at someone for so long
they no longer look the same

Like you've never really looked before
though you've seen them everyday?"

creepy, but it happens to me fairly often. Great write!

Janette
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2 posted 2003-08-23 06:36 PM


"Have you ever stared at someone for so long
they no longer look the same"

Oh my ... yes yes yes ... guilty as charged and it scares the hell out of me, too.

Great write here, dear Lady.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Ratleader
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3 posted 2003-08-23 09:11 PM


Like a jet -- hard, clean, purposeful and without waste of any kind....I like this kind of writing, and I like this poem very much.

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Kielo
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4 posted 2003-08-23 09:20 PM


*smile* You make excellent poems at the same rate I make mistakes! You're amazing! Seriously, though, once again, I love it.

Kielo

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5 posted 2003-08-23 09:22 PM


Gem,
how do you come up with such powerful words?

Your heart just bleeds into the ink..

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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6 posted 2003-08-24 09:00 AM


Gem, God . . .
I know EXACTLY what you mean . . .
you know I feel like these maybe three or four times a week and I wonder to myself:
What exactly occurred durung all of that time and do you even know who I am?
Freaked me out, you did
As always, beautiful writing
xxoo  

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2003-08-24 09:06 AM


gemjop
You reminisce with a kiss, enjoyed.

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