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Ceinwyn
Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2003-08-23 06:02 PM




upside down
right side up
broken
pieces of
crystal ball
dreams
distorted
screams
silent
thoughts
upside down
right side up
mascara
smearing
nylons
running
at the seams
broke
a heel
on
my new
little
black shoe
while
you
have me
running
backwards
in place
as you
softly
violate
my
comfort zone
i
would
love
to spit
my insecurities
in your face
and laugh
at your
nonchalant
oh so
sure words
you
holding me
only makes
the splinters
plunge deeper
within
my skin
piercing
the tears
upside down
right side up
do you
really
expect me
to
actually
begin
to
believe
in love
again
as you
softly
invade
my
comfort zone...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Kielo
Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

1 posted 2003-08-23 06:05 PM


*nod* You and I are thinking on the same page. Once again you write very well. You may not write to impress, but you do it anyway, consistently.

Kielo

eminor_angel
Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323
Canada
2 posted 2003-08-23 06:23 PM


lovely.
littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
3 posted 2003-08-24 09:08 AM


kris, you know if I were there, I would help you beat this chump's @$$ . . .
not that you need any help lol
but since Iam not I can offer my words
and my shoulder . . .
These lines are brilliant and God
would I love to do this too:

i
would
love
to spit
my insecurities
in your face

For it has been done many times to me
You are a beautiful writer and a
beautiful woman and dont you dare
let anyone tell or make you think
differently no matter how much it hurts
*smile*
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (08-24-2003 09:09 AM).]

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 2003-08-27 12:59 PM


Awesome poem, I love the way you presented it, that in my eyes added another dimension to this poem. Thanks for sharing.

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.



wandering glider
Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501
aloft
5 posted 2003-08-27 01:10 PM


This is good.
Now SPEAK UP!

[This message has been edited by wandering glider (08-27-2003 07:05 PM).]

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
6 posted 2003-08-27 01:20 PM


Kris, your streaming thoughts just poured down the page--and I just kept reading them faster and faster...

Gosh! What an incredibly creative vent!


Linda



Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
7 posted 2003-08-27 01:34 PM


Oh yeah!!!!! My fav line here is: 'I would love to spit my insecurities in your face'......Wow.....there is some kind of power in that one!!! ~S~

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart  ~~S~~

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