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angels and parkbenches |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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she smiles sings herself softly into the consciousness of a suit she smiles he frowns making his way back to metal and concrete she smiles pigeons scatter gathering feathers loose barefoot in the grass she smiles lost rebuilding wings |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Wow. Just.... wow.... Maybe one day I'll find the strength to imitate this. Until then, and after, I am in awe of your talent.  Kielo |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Double Wow!! Love this. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
oh god Raph I love this...like you have said many a time..if my tear ducts were working they'd be flowing like niagara falls .. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
she smiles lost rebuilding wings Love this image m'friend. Another fine write from you Sir Raph.  M ps. I'm keeping it. fate is not just |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Beautiful, Raph.. |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
Well penned with grace and beauty. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Raph...it's not often we get this kind of write from you... and on you, it looks good... do it again?  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I've been that guy -- I repent! Nice counterpoint, Raph...you are the champeen of this kind of thing. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very forlorn and tender, im seeing pidgeons lately myself |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I agree with Karilea, I really like this style from you. Time and time again your strength of a writer shines in all themes/styles. You blended a common angel theme with a unique theme and as always this poem is perfectly consise with power. Damn when I grow up I want to write just like you  I'm saving this, it's one of your best.....then again I'm biased I think that everything you write is da bomb!  Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Nice to see this tender part of you, Aenimal...sort of melted me. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ironically its the tender part that you don't see that gets me sad/angry enough to see the dark part you do see..thanks to all for the kind words |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhh . . . but why must you leave this beautiful image Raph? Left me feeling safe there for a sec *smile* I adore these lines: sings herself softly into the consciousness of a suit Very nice to see you again xxoo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I wish i could write like this...sigh Bellomxx Oh, you speak to me in riddles |
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