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Janette
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0 posted 2003-08-23 01:08 PM


brief fill ups

he is an empty vessel
longing for your joy and love
to once again fill him up
with brimming satisfaction

developing a pattern
he gives you little tidbits
you present him with a feast
never achieving balance

once he consumes you enough
reaching a certain degree
he becomes satiated
blocking your further entry

why does this always happen
perhaps life circumstances
peppered with his selfishness
stops perpetual full states

now you must ask yourself this
is he really worth your grief
to continually pour
yourself out for brief fill ups

Janette


Dedicated to those whom I see hurting and care about here at Passions ... see yourself?

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

© Copyright 2003 Janette - All Rights Reserved
inkedgoddess
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1 posted 2003-08-23 01:40 PM


you are a perceptive one;
well what else would we all have to write about then, if not the angst of love's lamentations?
sunny skies? lol................
smart cookie, you are
now, tell the cyberboys (and cyberfrogs) to stop hitting on us
vulnerable little fishes.............

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-23-2003 01:52 PM).]

Kaoru
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2 posted 2003-08-23 01:42 PM


..Yes
YES
..I'm at a loss for words..


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3 posted 2003-08-23 01:46 PM


Well-written, and yes. Yes, very much so.

Kielo

wounded and broken and hurting.... what scares me is that I'm starting to just not care, except that I wish I could cry the pain away....

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4 posted 2003-08-23 02:12 PM


Sadly, it works both ways, and no one ends up satiated.
A thought provoking good write, Janette.

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5 posted 2003-08-23 04:50 PM


I think I'll wait to comment, until I've read the second of these two poems.

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6 posted 2003-08-23 04:53 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Janette, I fell into this same kind of confluence, sweet friend, when I first knew Joanna, she said she had a crush on me and we developed a long-distance love eventually and I really loved her and she loved me, then Joanna said on New Years Day she never loved me and tore my vulnerable heart! (sad sigh) It is sad to see so many women and men tricked by crooked smiles, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janette, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

gemjop
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7 posted 2003-08-23 05:00 PM


oh my.
you've taken my breath, it's not funny when its his fourth chance, the selfishness, oh keeping this one, to remind me, i'm ok.

i'm ok.

thankyou!!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

1slick_lady
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8 posted 2003-08-23 05:07 PM


thank you so much for your concern but i am ok and if i am not i will be...after all i AM a poet...helen
catalinamoon
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9 posted 2003-08-23 11:50 PM


Oh you know I recognize myself. I guess I am not alone in this pain. Thanks for this.
Luv
S

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2003-08-25 01:18 AM


Nice thoughts...James
Bill Charles
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11 posted 2003-08-25 09:04 AM


Janette - I wonder why this happens, if only two could...

BC

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2003-08-25 09:29 AM


"is he really worth your grief
to continually pour
yourself out for brief fill ups"

~ hopefully I will never allow myself to be in that position again!

I'm sure there will be many readers who will identify with your poem which is filled with truths--and causes one to reflect...


EA

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13 posted 2003-08-25 10:40 AM


Janette, I don't know who this s intended for,
but you seemed to have gotten your point across.
All I can say is that it works both ways, from what
I can see...in other words, wher the "he" is, a "she" could
be inserted. Right? It seems to be a lot of the guys
who are letting themselves fall into this "cyber space"
web as well as the ladies. It's all sad to me.
Hugs to you and all of them  
Ethel

Patricia
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14 posted 2003-08-25 10:54 AM


now you must ask yourself this
is he really worth your grief
to continually pour
yourself out for brief fill ups

I could have quoted the entire poem, Janette. I am keep this one, if you don't mind, for a just in case moment. However, I do think you just put something...someone...to eternity's rest for me.   And just for good measure, I am going back for a few more reads to get your message firmly embedded in my mind.

Thank you, Poetess Janette.  You will never know how much you helped me!

Patricia

Janette
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15 posted 2003-08-25 08:03 PM


inkedgoddess - somehow I do NOT see you as the "filler up" kind of gal ... *wink* ... thanks for commenting, pretty Lady.

Kaoru - Oh ... that's OK and your "YES" is enough.  Hugs to you!

Midnitesun - I think you are correct, and I appreciate your thoughtful reply.

Ratleader - "the second of these two poems" ... sorry, blonde moment, I have no idea what you mean but thanks for stopping by.

Mistletoe Angel - Oh Noah, I do recall reading your romantic duets when you were so deeply in love and I am sorry that it did not work out as you planned.  Please know this ... I am certain that one day you shall love and be loved ... again ... for you are a fine man.

gemjop - yes ... you are "ok," in fact you are better than "ok," for you are working it all out through your fabulous writing.  You go girl!  Love your work.

1slick_lady - you are most welcome and I definitely agree with you ... you are an excellent poet where as I consider myself more of a story teller.  I greatly admire your work.

catalinamoon - Hugs to you, girl friend, and thanks.

James Michael - thank you, 5 year limit donut man. *wink* *wink*

Bill Charles - I agree, I agree.  Thanks for the read.

Earth Angel - I have been there, too, and find reflection good for my soul, thanks.

garysgirl - this was intended as stated ... to whomever it speaks to here at Passions.  Hugs back at you.

Patricia - What a lovely thing to tell me ... wow ... you have made my day, thank you!!!

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

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