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Labyrinth |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Never knew this feeling this second by second existed labyrinth string me out Trying to rescue in pitch black feeling, aching, rubbing along the coarse for some light relief when I sleep fitful facing forward, only going back does this mean giving the whole of soul is emptiness ever after you kicked my sandcastle, my heart, everything I never owned my sky, my peaceful night grotesque are the remains of all you left me with. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Like usual, your use of words is amazing, Gemma. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
gemjop Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If you were to walk a labyrinth, be it in either your waking or sleeping hours, you may find the answers to questions that need be asked... Your poetry rocks, kiddo!  Loves 'n huggums, LL |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
now I remember why I adore the british other than for the accents...  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"when I sleep fitful facing forward, only going back does this mean giving the whole of soul is emptiness ever after" Unfortunately love's questions rarely have such poetic answers. But one can dream, huh??  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
tis true, yet the light outside is blinding. never heard anything like this. heartbreak is a maze? you find many ways to show your pain. oh..the last line kicks butt insanity is not a crime |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"facing forward, only going back" This write is a-maze-ing. always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"Trying to rescue in pitch black feeling, aching, rubbing along the coarse for some light relief when I sleep fitful " WOW.. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou for these lovely replies friends. I'm just sorry I'm venting, the same stuff over and over, its boring, its making me feel awful, but with a bit of luck (?) ha, it'll help me feel better. in the end. when is that, by the way? xxxxxx Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
gem: giving the whole of soul is emptiness ever after yes, it feels like that, doesn't it? Until the day you look back and realize the reason it had to happen at all Whenever that is . . . lol xxoo |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Blindly we search for answers twisted, turned ... incoherent dancers Find your own rhythm, and heart's beat will find you. ox |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
 There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
you kicked my sandcastle, my heart, everything I never owned Gem i L@VE this line..awesome |
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