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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So face west with me and watch the sun in slow summer slide turn from brilliant heated white to shades of red that burn on lenses and mind until in final fade it slips beneath the sky This time of year the cicadas sing matching heat with buzz till ears ring and we in quiet sweat do find cool waves below to ease ourselves from this the daily bind Moonlight is late to us and reflected stars still stare when wet dripped skin does find the night. Tell me how it is the clouds have gone and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? Come, face east for now perhaps the sun will after all come out from that place it hides and we will see the beauty of an early fall |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
i like the contrast of west and east in the first and last stanzas. waaaa! summer's almost over.   |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Come, face east for now perhaps the sun will after all come out from that place it hides and we will see the beauty of an early fall" Captain...you have outdone yourself with this one... So beautiful...the last stanza allowed the rain to leak from my eyes. Why, did I find this so reflective? As though summer is drawing to a close... and I do not wish for it to.. not yet.. not now. ~Hugs~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Beautiful, Capitan, beautiful... ~Tier |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, yes, yes...you've captured the temps so well with the lazy buzz of the cicadas now melting into the last sounds of summer...where you can touch the air and know that only water is a little more wet to the touch, and you've captured the colors of the west, and east, so well... Ah, Captain...a  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Captain, you certainly know how to sail words right into the inner cores of your readers! Sheer poetry in motion.   EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
'in quiet sweat do find cool waves below to ease ourselves from this the daily bind" No one, I mean no one, writes like you do...how great would it be to be able to actually do this... I bathe in your words. Susan |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
crap..forgot to click on library. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Once again, I am in awe. Ron, you are incredible. Into my library this must go. Patricia |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"This time of year the cicadas sing matching heat with buzz till ears ring and we in quiet sweat do find cool waves below to ease ourselves from this the daily bind" Cicadas...  Well, I'm not quite ready for fall, but i'd agree that it's been a nice summer to look west. Oh and I'd like to ditto Susan.  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I look forward to fall. goodbye summer. lovely poem. yes, I know. I said 'lovely' insanity is not a crime |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
< ourselves from this the daily bind>> < and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? Come, face east for now perhaps the sun will after all come out from that place it hides and we will see the beauty of an early fall>> ====================== this has to be one of the best poems I've read in a while, and one I can most relate to...you've quite intelligently described exactly how I've been feeling about this summer, too...TOO LONG...but the imagery and vocab in this is extremely impressive...I guess I don't have to say that I thoroughly enjoyed it?  just a hang-up call and the quiet breathing of our persian we call cajun on a wednesday... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Another Ron collectible. 5th stanza's my favorite. Personally, I'm all for fall... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you... this is like zanax... |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Well done Mr. Ron! As always you blow me away.... you're amazing, you know that? Kielo |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"So face west with me and watch the sun in slow summer slide turn from brilliant heated white to shades of red that burn on lenses and mind until in final fade it slips beneath the sky" ...and I invisioned it all in my mind. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Tell me how it is the clouds have gone and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? Come, face east for now perhaps the sun will after all come out from that place it hides and we will see the beauty of an early fall Capt. Ron, you've made me speechless again.  I'm keeping this one, too. Hugs Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So face west with me and watch the sun in slow summer slide turn from brilliant heated white to shades of red that burn on lenses and mind until in final fade it slips beneath the sky =========================== in quiet sweat do find cool waves below to ease ourselves from this the daily bind Moonlight is late to us and reflected stars still stare when wet dripped skin does find the night. Tell me how it is the clouds have gone and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? ================================ well ya already know the moth is smiling at the allits ya slipped in. This poem is cooler than even I know... every single word is feast for the senses... and then lets talk about the slow burn in between the lines... moth giddy am I!!  So face west with me and watch the sun in slow summer slide turn from brilliant heated white to shades of red that burn on lenses and mind until in final fade it slips beneath the sky how awesome is that.... You rock!!! So does your muse. You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Come, face east for now perhaps the sun will after all come out from that place it hides and we will see the beauty of an early fall ******************************************** Having been born a 'Fall' child, I loved this line. What a cool write, Ron. Into the library you go. (the poem...but you can meet me in there any day  ) |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
Lovely *sigh* always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Tell me how it is the clouds have gone and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? Speaking of slight of touch -- this is the very thing! You paint panoramas of emotion, not just scenery. This one captures a bit of life. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
... your daddy's rich and your momma's good lookin... yeah summertime just like that Ron... great write |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Moonlight is late to us and reflected stars still stare when wet dripped skin does find the night. Tell me how it is the clouds have gone and how the slight of touch become this so shallow we do not wade into the depths of us? ========================= just came back to indulge myself in this gem again.... inhale...exhale.... *sigh* You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So face west with me and watch the sun in slow summer slide Ah, Cap'n... this one's going straight into my library. *S* A few days ago, I wrote something about autumn approaching... knew it needed work... now I know it needs so much I need not bother... I'll just read you. *S* |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You are a true romantic, Ron! This would be hard for most women to resist! Core |
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