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Robert Frazier
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0 posted 2003-08-22 02:48 PM


What i try with a downpour
You say in drop
upon drop
till I'm
drowning
in your perfect
rain




[This message has been edited by Robert Frazier (08-22-2003 03:22 PM).]

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eminor_angel
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1 posted 2003-08-22 02:52 PM


wow. i'm consistantly impressed by your works. great metaphor, i love it! wow . . . can't really  say much else and tell the truth. just wow.


Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2003-08-22 03:30 PM


Poetic perfect Robert!
This is a treasure for my library.
~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

angelblueyes
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Oklahoma
3 posted 2003-08-22 03:32 PM


Love the metaphor you use here.You are a talented poet.
Crystal

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2003-08-22 03:32 PM



...and, you did it in Twenty Or Less!!

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

Sunshine
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5 posted 2003-08-22 03:39 PM



So refreshing, this...
now please...

do it again.  And dance that rain dance
this way, Robert...

we need it so much!

QjQ
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6 posted 2003-08-22 04:11 PM


very nice 20 or less,

enjoyed the penning,,,

     


Robert Frazier
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7 posted 2003-08-22 04:13 PM


"twenty or less"...and to think i wasn't even trying!

thanks for kind words!

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2003-08-22 04:28 PM


Robert, I do believe you just rained a downpour--drop by drop! Your soft rain spoke volumes!


Linda

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9 posted 2003-08-22 04:38 PM


seems you distilled this to an essence...and indeed have something that holds its proof quite well..

a gentle smooth burn that warms as it goes down...

nicely done sir.. nicely done indeed.


Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
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10 posted 2003-08-22 09:07 PM


...some have perfect rain, and some have a perfect way of describing it... ~K~
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