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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-08-22 01:35 PM



So you danced on top of clouds
With stumbles that bolted to the ground
Always a tremble to follow
Cacophony built of plasma arcs
To rumble
Crumble down

Feel you hair stand on end?
I do..
Each time I look at you
Each time you draw close
I’m earth
That absorbs the flash
And burns
While you prance brilliant
Chaotic leaps
Lighting the billowed grey
Of each and every day.

What convection of heart
Drew you to such heights?

When does relief
Slant in wind driven sheets
That soak skin

Tell me…
Is it all a Sin?

To reach for the rain
And find yourself

Again?

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angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
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1 posted 2003-08-22 01:37 PM


Very good.I can feel the passion from within you as I read these words.
Crystal

Martie
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2 posted 2003-08-22 01:38 PM


Wow....Ron..You're on a roll!  Fabulous emotional pull in this...you stormed me with this one!
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2003-08-22 01:47 PM


WOW!!  Fantastic Captain..
A sin?...no never!!
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2003-08-22 01:48 PM



I do believe
you've found the silver
in the gray...

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2003-08-22 01:56 PM


loving the pounding rain Cap.

Keep 'em coming.


Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-08-22 02:03 PM


Ahhh..not satisfied with the beauty of the last....well, you certainly captured it here...

Susan

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06
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7 posted 2003-08-22 02:59 PM


"To reach for the rain
And find yourself"

poet, this is a gem of a line!

[This message has been edited by Robert Frazier (08-22-2003 03:00 PM).]

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17
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8 posted 2003-08-22 04:15 PM


I don't know how this managed to escape my notice. I'm running out of compliments for your work.

I enjoy them all.

~Tier

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