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People Watching (Serenity's Challenge) Confides and Confesses
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People Watching (Serenity's Challenge) Confides and Confesses |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri 
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Confides and Confesses Unique her inescapable corner Its centerpiece- an intimidating, grand oak desk, which undoubtedly took great pains to navigate in to such cramped quarters Scents of old money, chamomile, and lavender potpourri wafted from her haven in breeze of my swift pass. Occasionally, I was summoned to her den as she edited work in my presence, always in teacher’s red, while extolling virtues of proper proofreading. Just as her hair, never a strand left to chance. Impressed with the press of her A-line seam, never a crinkle, nor wrinkle upon her ensemble and few upon her face. Her fifty plus years graced her well. Certainly, every detail clearly enunciated her ancestors’ Mayflower voyage As time passed, my pages found less red, giving us a chance to speak rather than mince words Within our writers’ conversations, we found friendship Confides and confesses, soon left me no choice than to repaint Da Vinci’s canvass Late afternoon tales of childhood wrote her true story as her words unfolded upon my mind’s screen in 30’s black and white Born in dirt floor poverty, Daddy drank his way through the better part of the week. Sober Sunday, he preached from the old Southern Baptist pulpit Mama passed when she was nine, an unforgivable abandonment. But in the swelter of summer Alabama, she dreamed, dreamed a soft, sweet dream of cradling a baby doll in her thin, frail arms Determined, a poor little girl transformed a bleach bottle and scrap of burlap into her very own. Tears filled her eyes over her reading specs, once I thought to be designer eyewear A fast forward spin brought this story to her days of newly wed, when a little girl’s dream came to fruition. As other new brides selected sheets and lovely spreads for their marriage beds, she found herself shopping for just one adornment for their bedroom... A doll, her baby doll. And in that one afternoon of confides and confesses, my view would never see the same. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Patricia An excellent write, enjoyed very much. Thank you for posting. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent observations... and, one of your best yet. Surely, Serenity will be smiling... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, you have bowled me over with this fine piece of mature writing! Pat yourself on the back and kiss the mirror for me! This is definitely going into my personal treasure trove of collectable poetry!  Kudos, Patricia!  Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Patricia...This is fantastic!! You brought this woman and her surroundings to life. A keeper for my library ..wonderful piece of work here. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ya did good... very good... nice writing. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You did absolutely wonderful here and I'm keeping this one  I love reading your writes,because I can feel and see you within your words.  Crystal |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
My goodness you are good. I have this "thing" about smells, (smile?) I'm kidding, but I'm not--when someone describes smells to me I am halfway there. That "scents of old money verse" was intense for me, because I still could smell things implied there too--coffee, leather, paper and ink. OH. Mimeograph-smell! That was it! (grin...see how I get excited?) and that how's that for an opener too: "Unique her inescapable corner" Unique YOU. There is so much here to enjoy. I think I'll save some for later.  This is wonderful Patricia. I'm keeping it, if ya don't mind. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Patricia, goodness this is astounding! See, so many times we never even realize what may be going on with the other person, you know? What an amazing glimpse into this woman and a heartfelt display of struggle More than met indeed xxoo |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful writing! Eric |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Patricia, this is absolutely wonderful writing. It was like I was sitting there with this woman while she was telling me all these happenings of her life. I'm keeping this too. I hope you don't mind.  Hugs Ethel |
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