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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2003-08-22 01:36 AM



Just for fun... been too busy to write much lately. Peace -

Murder of None
©2003 C.G. Ward


silence developed
while parting her hair with a remark
proving more foolish,
than vain.

‘open up your smile,’
she sighed (-again-).
I did,
but an echo never mirrors fear.

oh, for the days of brooding.

melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace.

- or any other emotion touted by the seven-pm sitcom.

so we joined Odysseus
and commented on the depths of a nothingness
others claimed profound.

- sitcom again, I think.
                                     oh the joy of complacency...

we took a bow,
for nothing really,
other than a prickle of arrogance striking
at the moment of climax.

do finales come in threes?

it was quiet in the theatre,
so she laughed at my tears;
seems they didn't mesh with her paradigm...
whatever the hell that means.
the audience wept, laughed, then rose as one
to race for intermittent concessions...

sporadic misery. elusive. conclusive. mesmerizing: translucent.

kings and queens danced –
Tyler took the stage,
she evaporated,
and I wondered at the beauty of solitude.

translucent, I think.

rise. bow. depart.

     as the silent jaws of a dragon
     crunch the cricket,
     I whisper goodbye.


© Copyright 2003 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
1 posted 2003-08-22 01:52 AM


melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace.

It's been a while, and it's just grand to read you again!  
Please don't be saying good-bye just for fun.  

I've missed your work Christopher,
and this was a welcome comeback!  


Nicole
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2 posted 2003-08-22 06:56 AM


hmmmmm - vellly intellesting

*mom hat* And where the hell have you been mister?!  You're grounded!  

Honestly?  I don't know why I bother replying this early in the morning, I mean, I can hardly function as a human - and then I try to write something meaningful??  sigh  Well, at least you know me well enough to know what I meant to say.  *chuckle*

Okay, so, I won't bother with the "well done" "good write" blah blah blah, because you know what I think about that - BUT - I'll point out some lines that I found particularly striking:

"oh, for the days of brooding.

melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace."

This is great - melancholia is such an art form, and it's savored by so many.  I often wonder if it's a more desired state of mind than happiness or contentment.  The whole statement speaks a lot, and I could write for days about it, but won't.  *laughing*  (not enough coffee)

(chuckling at seven-pm sitcom)

"oh the joy of complacency..."

Wow - the tone I read this in, totally laced with sarcasm.  But not 'that' sarcasm, that kind of resigned sarcasm, sort of like when it can't be changed?  Make sense?  (yeah, thought not)  

"it was quiet in the theatre,
so she laughed at my tears;
seems they didn't mesh with her paradigm...
whatever the hell that means."

This last stanza made me chuckle and smile.  Whatever the hell that means, indeed.  

Your writing has changed so much over the years, and I'm glad to say that I've seen the whole transition.  It's been quite fascinating (of course, it's YOU ... heh)

BOL
Hugs, love
Nic



Janet Marie
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3 posted 2003-08-22 07:23 AM


silence developed
while parting her hair with a remark
proving more foolish,
than vain.

‘open up your smile,’
she sighed (-again-).
I did,
but an echo never mirrors fear.

oh, for the days of brooding.

melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace.
============================
so we joined Odysseus
and commented on the depths of a nothingness
others claimed profound.

================
we took a bow,
for nothing really,
other than a prickle of arrogance striking
at the moment of climax.

do finales come in threes?

it was quiet in the theatre,
so she laughed at my tears;
seems they didn't mesh with her paradigm...
whatever the hell that means.
=====================
she evaporated,
and I wondered at the beauty of solitude.

translucent, I think.


=================================

the moth is giddy here....
first I find a rare post by Ron and now you
you put up "just for fun" and yet the poem is NO joke...what a very cool write of personification and character study. The analogies you used to express the emotions are cleverly done and made the poem.

silence developed
while parting her hair with a remark
proving more foolish,
than vain.



how cool is that...waaaay cool


melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace.


and that........
wow....I love that lil verse of poetic profundity.
Me thinks I need that one tatooed on me somewhere.  lol

So good to read you again Chris..have missed you round here.
Hope life is treating you well, or at least inspiring you well.   

Its been a million years since I touched you
I was hoping time would help me win this game,
but being away from you is slowly driving me insane.


Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2003-08-22 08:57 AM


I saw the name and KNEW I was in for a treat.  Your words always amaze me my friend, just amaze me.  I still say there will come the day when we here at Passions will all be saying....I knew him when.....

You are an incredible talent Christopher, I have missed your words. Come visit more often ok?  

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

Nan
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5 posted 2003-08-22 09:24 AM


Indeed - I think "grounded" sounds fair... Nice to see you and your non-murderous work, Chris - Hoping all's well with you...
Tiersdin
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6 posted 2003-08-22 11:12 AM


Hello Golden Voice!

Good to read your words again.

*smiles*

~Tier

angelblueyes
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7 posted 2003-08-22 12:20 PM


Intriguing and interesting.I enjoyed this.
Crystal

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8 posted 2003-08-22 12:34 PM


Hey you.

The prodigal poet just walks in here and seemingly tosses one off casually, and then says "What?" in innocence.

can't pick a favorite line.

(All of your lines have always been GOOD.)

*wince*

I wait for that brotherly "frog" on the arm now.

But truly?

Thanks for bringing me to the show C.

You've been missed.

Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2003-08-22 06:06 PM


Christopher~
Fascinating intrigue~

And ... ya' lie ... cause the closer is a killer~

Nice to see you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

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10 posted 2003-08-22 07:50 PM


Christopher! Great to see a post of yours once again. Gives my brain a workout and makes me wish I could write even a smidgen as well as you. Awesome. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

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11 posted 2003-08-22 11:02 PM


Toerag gets people to pray for him....Christopher posts a poem...what a week!!

Hey, I majored in that nothingness!

It's a pleasure to see your name again, Chris

Ceinwyn
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12 posted 2003-08-22 11:07 PM


I am always in awe when I read your words...and I never know what to say..but this says it all   How's that for improving on my commenting...lol

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Janette
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13 posted 2003-08-23 07:43 PM


"but an echo never mirrors fear."

Touche'

Excellent read here.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Duncan
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14 posted 2003-08-23 09:40 PM


"melancholy is an art,
I found.
     but only in moments,
and never steadfast enough to find peace.

- or any other emotion touted by the seven-pm sitcom.

so we joined Odysseus
and commented on the depths of a nothingness
others claimed profound.

- sitcom again, I think.
                                     oh the joy of complacency..."

Hey C...damn good to read you again.  
Seinfeld, perhaps?  
And yeah...you've been missed.  Stick around a bit?  

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15 posted 2003-08-23 10:24 PM


Christopher, I was shocked to see you here.......
Am very glad I did, though. You've been missed
around here, you know.

Oh, and of course your poem was an excellent write.....
you already knew that, didn't you?
Hugs  
Ethel


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16 posted 2003-08-23 11:41 PM


hey Chris

missed seeing you around here

glad you could pop in and drop this one on us though -- you should make more time to write

(he says whilste explaining to the world why he himself has , no time)


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17 posted 2003-08-23 11:48 PM


Very interesting write!

Not familiar with your work (due to own lack of time), but after reading this I intend on finding more of your words!

Tima

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18 posted 2003-08-24 12:26 PM


Ouch, this one was so good it hurt!!
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19 posted 2003-08-24 01:02 AM


what a work of art you are.....brilliant and I am lovin that last stanza.....you stay away far too long.....hurry back you know you are so missed......

muwwwaaahhhsss and hugssssssssss
Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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20 posted 2003-08-24 01:38 AM


Ok, it has been a while, but to come and read something that reads with such profound ease is truly worth the "click"...
You are still one of my favorites to come here and read.

Thanks,
Jeff

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21 posted 2003-08-24 08:37 AM



All right, young man.  
This was for fun.  
Now show us serious.

This is the real Mom speaking...
welcome home.

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22 posted 2003-08-24 10:25 AM


Dang, Chris! wish I could write for fun,
I wondered if you had abandoned us 'serious' pipsters.


I love this write, so I'm keeping it.

And yes, melencholy really is an art... beyond angst.

Patricia
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23 posted 2003-08-24 10:36 AM


So much to savor...amazing, just amazing!
Going back for a second helping.

I'll be looking for you!

Patricia

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24 posted 2003-08-24 11:25 PM


bout time you stopped in
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
25 posted 2003-08-29 12:11 PM


Hey all, thanks for the kudos and kindness. Time is not my friend lately, being as rare as the fabled loch ness monster. I pause here and there to poke my head in for a read, but appreciate moments like this, when have a few more minutes.

Again, thanks all...

C

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