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Magnus
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0 posted 2003-08-21 09:00 PM


The sway of the train, lulling the senses,
boredom from the five o-clock ride to suburbia.
Looking innocently around, observing the
other passengers....until....

Until I saw those legs, smooth as silk, climbing
skyward into the clouds of many thoughts...
Could she possibly notice my gaze?  Or....
Am I free to gently caress this beauty, unnoticed.

My heart, pounding slightly faster at the thought
of the game, the game of which glance is quickest,
whose gaze will turn away first.....who will win?

The minutes, passing quickly as the continued
gentle sway lulls some to doze, others to join
the quest against the bore of daily toil and the
trudge and trek home.

Glancing left, noticing that I am far from alone,
a wry smile upon a lovely face, sharing the
moment of the game.  Smiling back,   I turn
and return my gaze to her.....Only to find
she has moved.

“Hi”....  legs say to me, “ like your threads,
oh.....  your glasses.....  they are a little
fogged....”


© Copyright 2003 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
angelblueyes
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1 posted 2003-08-21 09:02 PM


I liked this one alot.You always write so well and my interest is held from beginning to end
Crystal

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2 posted 2003-08-21 09:05 PM


ah...girl watching, eh?

you rogue, you!

and, um, is there a sequel to this'n?



Enjoyed your enjoyment.

Magnus
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3 posted 2003-08-21 09:12 PM


Ser.  I used to do sequels to little tidbits
like this...mayhaps there might be....
Rogue?  Me?  sheesh....at my age......??

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-08-22 01:26 PM


Barry . . .
ahahaha I had to laugh at the title after I read
wa . .  wa . .  wa . . . watching

hmmm . . .
Made me smile, ya did
nicely met
xxoo

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5 posted 2003-08-22 02:05 PM


*big smile*

hugs you

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6 posted 2003-08-22 02:08 PM


Yes...you are a rogue!
And you get a huge sigh from me for this one!!
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

garysgirl
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7 posted 2003-08-22 02:11 PM


Barry, I enjoy watching you men watching our legs...always have. It sounds like you both were enjoying it....and the fogged glasses?? HeeHee!!! Got steamy there, huh? LOL

Challenge well met, Sir..
Hugs  
Ethel

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8 posted 2003-08-22 02:49 PM


I love the detail...and the ending!
Eric

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9 posted 2003-08-22 02:51 PM


lol... you are a rascal aren't you????

Nicely done my friend

Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2003-08-22 03:01 PM


Barry~We do it on purpose...


Patricia
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11 posted 2003-08-22 08:36 PM


Yep, Susan is right!  So smiling at you...

Patricia

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12 posted 2003-08-22 08:44 PM


Barry...yep, no doubt about it, you are cute!
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