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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2003-08-21 04:00 PM




deep sigh
eyes closed
love
found me

flicker of hope
reason suspends
heart beating
passion
astounds me

tracing of lips
with shaking
fingertips
fulfilling
dreams around me

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Toad
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1 posted 2003-08-21 04:31 PM



Conveying a message clearly in a poem, or any form of communication for that matter, gets exponentially harder as you use less and less words. You’ve managed to do it superbly here with less than thirty.

Thanks for the chance to read and reply

vandana
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2 posted 2003-08-21 04:36 PM


enjoyed
Enchantress
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3 posted 2003-08-21 04:53 PM


Softly sensual...much enjoyed.
~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2003-08-21 05:29 PM


I love this feeling, wish to have it back some day~

*s
M

Dark Angel
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5 posted 2003-08-21 05:37 PM


Beautifully expressed Ms deVine.



Maree  


fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-21-2003 05:37 PM).]

suthern
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6 posted 2003-08-22 11:30 AM


Ah, lady... I love the title... and the poem fulfilled its promise. *S* Beautiful!
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7 posted 2003-08-22 12:06 PM


Wonderfully expressed in such few words.
Crystal

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8 posted 2003-08-22 12:51 PM


Beautiful Sharon . . .

tracing of lips
with shaking
fingertips

nice imagery
xxoo

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9 posted 2003-08-23 12:50 PM


flicker of hope
reason suspends
heart beating
passion
astounds me


Uh-huh!!Very good writing!
Hugs  
Ethel


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10 posted 2003-08-23 12:54 PM


*smile* You're good. (Don't worry, I'm understating). I like it a lot!

Kielo

wounded and broken and hurting.... what scares me is that I'm starting to just not care, except that I wish I could cry the pain away....

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11 posted 2003-08-23 01:06 AM


"tracing of lips
with shaking
fingertips
fulfilling
dreams around me"

~ Sounds like a devine way to spend an evening! I truly enjoy your sensual writes!

To life and loving!
EA

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12 posted 2003-08-23 03:10 AM


Beautifully penned, sweets..
Sunnyone
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13 posted 2003-08-23 06:55 AM


Mmmm.....a sensual delight....love your style, PdV!!!!  ~S~
Nan
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14 posted 2003-08-23 08:57 AM


Very nice, PdV - I particularly like your second stanza - It pretty much says it all...
Patricia
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15 posted 2003-08-23 09:05 AM


Oh, this is so good.  Few words spoke volumes.

Love it!

Patricia

Poet deVine
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16 posted 2003-08-23 09:35 AM


Thank you all for reading my little poem. I'm so glad you like it!
lucky
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17 posted 2003-08-23 03:17 PM



Aye, lass... this be a good one.

lucky dale


Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
18 posted 2003-08-23 03:21 PM


love found you..and your muse!
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19 posted 2003-08-23 04:30 PM


An incredibly beautiful love poem. Enjoyed this immensely. ***Ivy Rose
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