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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2003-08-21 04:43 AM


She nodded, saying, "I've seen you."
She added oils to the cloth.
Just a drop of expertise
leaving tarnish to the nap...

"I used to be in love like that"
She rocked as if she boasted chair
nothing but her fingertips
rubbing, as if that, brought luck...

I saw scabs on cuticles
scars she thought no one would see--
nervous evidence of thumb
pick-pick-picking constantly...

"I used to be in love like that"
She moved the knife across the stone--
circles on the edge of blade--
she caught the light and smiled.


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-21-2003 05:29 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-08-21 06:41 AM


First word to cross mind...
eerie...

second word?...

motive.

WOW!

gemjop
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2 posted 2003-08-21 07:31 AM


She rocked as if she boasted chair
nothing but her fingertips
rubbing, as if that, brought luck...


damn, take another, i'm hungry for more.

into me library.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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3 posted 2003-08-21 10:21 AM


She nodded, saying, "I've seen you."


That line would scare the crap out of me..yikes....

But oh yes, I would have stayed for more...

Susan

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2003-08-21 10:44 AM


Me too, Karen, "used to be in love like that" only I haven't the bad habits,
just the wearing down of my soul.


M

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vandana
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5 posted 2003-08-21 10:44 AM


enjoyed this
vlraynes
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6 posted 2003-08-21 10:46 PM



"She nodded, saying, "I've seen you."
She added oils to the cloth.
Just a drop of expertise
leaving tarnish to the nap...

"I used to be in love like that"
She rocked as if she boasted chair
nothing but her fingertips
rubbing, as if that, brought luck..."

Oh...I love this, Karen.  I can see her
there, and hear her voice and the
rocking of her chair.

You've penned her perfectly.

Hugs, you...

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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