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0 posted 2003-08-20 02:21 PM






It's In The Card

Over ten years old now, it sits out all the time
a pleasant little card, one that is just mine,
a china doll on her seat, heirloom silk replete
blackest hair, china shy-blue eyes
on wicker stool, you can hear her sigh

words on the card front, denoting memories
a mother's recollection of echoes in the eve
here she calls me special, like she did back then
inside the card I'm her little one
no matter where, no matter when

and in her Mom-scrawl, a running hand
she notes I'll never realize [she still commands]
how very proud she always was
of me, her firstborn, it gives me pause
over ten years gone, these words still cause

a tear.

Over ten years old now, it sits out all the time
a pleasant little card, one that is just mine.


~*~


©Karilea Rilling Jungel
Circa 22 September, 2000
Revised 11 August 2002



© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-08-20 02:27 PM


cards seem so often to be a cherished thing..a few thoughts and a mark of thoughtful intent.. carried with us to remember..to document..

nicely done K

Robert Frazier
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2 posted 2003-08-20 03:04 PM


I should send my own daughter more cards...more messages like this.
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3 posted 2003-08-20 03:16 PM


Awesome!
Well met,
You and Susan did this really well.

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-08-20 03:30 PM


Ohhh...about 5 yrs ago my Mom gave me my baby book...and in it...all her notes about how special I was (also the first born) and how brilliant I was...lol  

I really enjoyed this!

Susan

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5 posted 2003-08-20 04:22 PM


This is very special Karilea...as the card must be so precious to you.
Very well done..now I must find these challenges.
~Hugs~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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6 posted 2003-08-20 05:05 PM



~ ~ memory's are cherished ~ ~


        

[This message has been edited by QjQ (08-20-2003 05:05 PM).]

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