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minoune
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since 2003-08-10
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Canada

0 posted 2003-08-20 07:40 AM


In the eyes of a child,
you'll see true bliss
Everything is right,
nothing amiss
In everything they do, there is such pride
We can't help but know, how they feel inside
As the child grows older, the innocence wanes
but the pride of that child continues to gain
They constantly look to please each day
Hoping that kind words will come their way
The playfulness, the love, as unconditionnal as can be...
is there automatically
But in order to keep that child inside,
you must let it out... don't let it hide
Just like a child let out to play
their anxious to start each and every day..
No expectations, no worries, no fears,
that comes as we grow through the years,
which is why i am asking you to let that child out..
for the sake of your sanity
for the love of yourself...
Each one of us is a child inside,
why should we continue to let it hide
we deserve to go out and play
and we need to be able to start a new day
knowing that things will be okay
So do yourself a favour and let that inner child out
You won't regret it , and smiles will sprout
For being this way is contagious as can be..
and people all around you, will begin to see
That its alright to frolic and play
and to not look any further than today

Minoune



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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2003-08-20 08:37 AM


Delightful! My inner child would like to have some fun and play in the sun with your inner child!

Loves 'n hugs from both of us!




Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
2 posted 2003-08-20 08:41 AM


Enjoyed the read,
Two points, the first four lines, why are they not two?
Is there some significance to the few lines with loss of rhyme?

Minor points, don’t detract from the overall

Gloom

minoune
Member
since 2003-08-10
Posts 87
Canada
3 posted 2003-08-20 09:17 AM


thankyou for the tips professor... a few glitches i know... but learning lol
Earth Angel, every day the child in me i let come out... and when i do... i feel so good inside and out... come play with me... and let the children be who they always were...
*hugs*

minoune

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