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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Even now as we sit partaking from this wine and dried fruit we so horded on those long days of trekking across barren sands under the sun which never relented in its efforts to burn us into a state of purity the sand is shifting into the tracks of our camels and soon we will be a forgotten trace but for the hidden or protected odd print that does not settle into the dunes but lingers a day or two after we are gone. Our lives were such prints until they joined as they have today and we found the bonds of grain allowing a bit of us to be left when we are gone and resting in the arms of Allah Perhaps someone will read of us and wonder at how our love so reflects theirs of how it was when we were young and ran naked along the rivers edge only to fall into each other and join the water as we joined flowing... like sand like water The days change us the years.. rob us of the time Even now... there are grains blowing across the lines of this page obscuring the words abrading the hearts Sip with me. the night is young and tomorrow we must journey on I will read for you those things I have written and you may frown or smile at the clumsy words "It begins here, with you and ends only when the sphinx no longer stares." [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-19-2003 04:47 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It does begin... with you... when we read, and are quenched, or at the very best, inspired...yet again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Captain, your words flow like sand like water... ..and they sizzle like the sun. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"The days change us the years.. rob us of the time" I robbed myself of time by wasting it on the wrong people... Your writings are so romantic and hopeful.. Susan |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
My daughter wanted some of those "siteless braces" and I checked into them and those things are really expens.....oh wait a minute.....SIGHTLESS TRACES!!!..Never mind...good write though... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I see visions in the waves rippling from the sands... smile. Hugging you. yer gorgeous. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"It begins here, with you and ends only when the sphinx no longer stares." ~ a journey that will span eternity... Wondrous whisperings of the heart.   EA |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
The days change us the years.. rob us of the time yup! True that. Such a wonderfully romantic write. Keeping it. Maree  fate is not just |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Even now as we sit partaking from this wine and dried fruit we so horded on those long days of trekking across barren sands under the sun which never relented in its efforts to burn us into a state of purity the sand is shifting into the tracks of our camels and soon we will be a forgotten trace but for the hidden or protected odd print that does not settle into the dunes but lingers a day or two after we are gone. Our lives were such prints until they joined as they have today and we found the bonds of grain allowing a bit of us to be left when we are gone and resting in the arms of Allah ============================= If I start smoking Camels...will I be able to write like this??????? sheesh....... your muse is awesome!! "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I particularly like the latter part of this: from "Even now . . ." A nice sense of time, enigma that it is. Kraw' |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"The days change us the years.. rob us of the time Even now... there are grains blowing across the lines of this page obscuring the words abrading the hearts Sip with me. the night is young and tomorrow we must journey on I will read for you those things I have written and you may frown or smile at the clumsy words "It begins here, with you and ends only when the sphinx no longer stares."" LOL @ JM!! Damn bud, saw your name, thought it was a mirage. Must be those darn buttons I been chewing on...  Seriously, this is a perfect example of the kind of poetry I like most from you. Classic Capt...  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
you've got mad skills sir. I am once again in awe... insanity is not a crime |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Perhaps someone will read of us and wonder at how our love so reflects theirs Perhaps? *S* Make that certainly. *S* Excellent write, Cap'n! *S* It's a treat to read you. *S* |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
should I even look for the way out?... after finding myself lost, again, in one of your poems. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
I so love your writing. ~tier |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron I do love these looks into such a far distant way into this love. Much obliged! |
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