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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2003-08-19 10:11 AM



It is late summer
The time of dancing heat
That likes to fool the mind and eyes

Into thinking relief lies just there
On the horizon as blue water
To quench parched tongues
And offer relief of oppressive days.

Even the Clerics are fooled
By these false hopes,
And in despair swim the dust
Delirium driven lust tells them
Over the whisper of Allah
Is relief.

These days
I would sit in shade of date
Contemplating those times
And words exchanged with you
Over time and heart.

To journey far now,
Foolish
For seasons are to change again
And the flow of spring be restored
That in stop of oasis we might drink
And not starve for life

Soon it will cool
And rains visit cracked lands
As the sun is taken by his hand
To burn other lands into purity
And we…

Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you

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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2003-08-19 10:15 AM


Cpat Hair
Nicely done, enjoyed.

gemjop
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2 posted 2003-08-19 10:17 AM


These days
I would sit in shade of date
Contemplating those times
And words exchanged with you
Over time and heart.

It seems like its been years since i've read you my pretty!

You draw me in. and this? it could have been written for me. you've read my mind. not that i could ever write in this way, only you could ever say it this way. i feel every word this very moment. I could cry. but I'll try not to!

I'm in awe.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

LeeJ
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3 posted 2003-08-19 10:21 AM


beautifully written and the acceptance of what is....
Sunshine
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4 posted 2003-08-19 10:24 AM



...and in this, the trace
of finger
over pool of petal,
where a kiss would dwell,
just so

in your absence,
I place the petal
to float in the pool,
that light
meets light...

~*~

I do have to thank you for the inspire...



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5 posted 2003-08-19 10:28 AM


*sigh* Sweet....love it...

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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6 posted 2003-08-19 10:32 AM


"And we…

Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you"

Oh my...sigh....missed you
Love this....more please?
~Summertime Smiles~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2003-08-19 10:35 AM


"Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you"

This caught me on a bad day...My eyes nearly leaked...and that is so not me...

"The arguments of why"....this is something I do all the time...

Beautifully written as always.

Susan

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8 posted 2003-08-19 10:50 AM


May the garden of your life be full of sweet remembrances--and new blooms to come...

A lovely write, Dear Captain! Missed you!


EA

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9 posted 2003-08-19 10:57 AM


Thank you all..

Sy.. thank you sir for taking time to read and leave a word of encouragement

Gem.. no need to be in awe..lol.. but I am pleased you enjoyed and that it found a way to speak to you

Lee.. acceptance of what is sometimes is the only way to deal with now, knowing things change.

Sunshine... for the inspire..lol.. you are welcome... thank you for sharing it.

Kristie... thank you ma'am... a nice comment indeed.

nancy.. can't promise more anytime soon, but I am sure in time there is more to be written and said. Thank you dear lady..for the kind words.

Susan... my apologies for causing any leaks... my thanks for the nice compliment.
I do hope the day gets better for you.

EA... thank you sweet lady... one sometimes finds the things they search for in their minds if not in their life... may you always find yours on your doorstep.

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10 posted 2003-08-19 11:42 AM


I can only think of one word...

Beautiful...


~Tier

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11 posted 2003-08-19 11:56 AM


Soon it will cool
And rains visit cracked lands
As the sun is taken by his hand
To burn other lands into purity
And we…

Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you


Capt ron, I wish so much that I coulkd write like you do.
You are  sooooo  gooodd!!

Hugs  
Ethel

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12 posted 2003-08-19 12:08 PM


I just popped back in to thank you for the thoughtful response to my reply!
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13 posted 2003-08-19 01:11 PM



And in despair swim the dust
Delirium driven lust tells them
Over the whisper of Allah
Is relief.

These days
I would sit in shade of date
Contemplating those times
And words exchanged with you
Over time and heart.
=======================
And we?

Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you
==============================


Do you see how your words inspire and move us???
Even in drought you are a cool drink of verse


and then there is this....

And in despair swim the dust
Delirium driven lust tells them


ya know the moth is smiling at your allits, internal rhymes, assonance and word play.
why Im moth giddy   
may the rain fall softly on your rose of suppose ...


then may you write of it .  *S*


"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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14 posted 2003-08-19 01:18 PM


CPatHair~

'we…

Shall lie again beneath stars
Counting the arguments of why
The petal of a rose
Reminds me of you'


I would leave a *soft sigh of satisfaction* for having read this lovely piece~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~



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15 posted 2003-08-19 01:41 PM


As always Ron, amazing
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