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gemjop
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0 posted 2003-08-18 08:59 PM


His obvious blue
seem to meet
my painted lashes

~but not quite

each sip
swallow
and lick

tempt me
to stay
for another

just incase

tapping the
cut glass
eyes match
the definition
in his
rhythm

fizz

bubbles rise
in beer
though
his blue
sparkles
deeper

dangles
cigarette
from mouth

I'd so
like to kiss
again

the blue
oh the blue

I remember
when
they
felt
like
sky

his
childlike
softness
churns
my
eyes
crazy
.
.
.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

© Copyright 2003 gj - All Rights Reserved
Wind
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1 posted 2003-08-18 09:13 PM


I'll come back and say something senseable later. now I'm..erm. stupid? whatever

insanity is not a crime

Kaoru
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2 posted 2003-08-18 10:26 PM


Challenge well met, Gem.

God, you're amazing.

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-08-18 10:55 PM


All I can say is you are very talented.

Cold hands means a warm heart

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-08-18 11:02 PM


Gem . . .

please . . . next time you see this . .
walk on over . . . lol
THAT is how well you have met this challenge
*smile*
xxoo

ok I just saw that it is someone you know . . .
but still . . .

[This message has been edited by littlewing (08-18-2003 11:04 PM).]

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2003-08-18 11:06 PM


oh my...


sounds like someone I know too.

whimper.

Y'made me miss him MORE, and I didn't think that possible.

Hugs, gemma.

I'm keeping this one, because oh-I-wish-I'd-written-this....

goodhrtd
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6 posted 2003-08-19 12:06 PM


This is so mischevious...I love it!
Ratleader
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7 posted 2003-08-19 12:17 PM


Woo, like the naughty thoughts..... and the way you show them -- so much so, that I read right through your signature as if it were part of the poem.....oops!

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Temptress
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8 posted 2003-08-19 12:53 PM


Beautifully done challenge.

Dear John,
IF YOU'RE TIRED OF PRETENDING..
THEN WHY DID YOU GO BACK INTO HIDING?



gemjop
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9 posted 2003-08-19 07:42 AM


wow, thankyou so much. I didnt really like this, felt like i couldn't get it right, but he was just the perfect subject, even though not a stranger.

He saw me in the end

Instant karma's gonna get you.

LeeJ
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10 posted 2003-08-19 10:10 AM


in reading this poem and the comments, I'd say we literally all know the same guy????
and I do mean the very same guy????

Great poem as always.  Thank you for sharing.

El_Campeador
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11 posted 2003-08-19 12:25 PM


You conquered this challenge, Gemma. Good job.

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Wind
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12 posted 2003-08-19 12:54 PM


see? I'm fine now. told ya I'd come back. twas worth reading twice. oh.. I need to write something very dark and depressing. I am feeling so freaked out and its in the middle of daylight. ever felt like that? its like someone's watching me. see I've got the shivers now.

insanity is not a crime

Aenimal
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13 posted 2003-08-19 01:48 PM


Liz it's the bogey-man, gem fantastic no matter how hard you are on your writing youre adored here you wanker
nakdthoughts
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14 posted 2003-08-19 01:56 PM


very pleasant to read...and watch

*s
M

garysgirl
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15 posted 2003-08-19 02:19 PM


Gemma, my friend...I do believe we have all looked into these eyes...but my "he" has brown ones.  LOL

You know, sweetie, you are getting very popular around PIP.
How could people not love you and your personality...it shows through your poems and replies, Sweetie. I'm so proud of you. Hey, I think I'm going to go get my "Gemma" rictameter and repost it for you.
Hugs  
Ethel Mae

timothysangel1973
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16 posted 2003-08-30 12:06 PM


This was incredible, I missed it too.  I'm out digging tonight...

[This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (08-30-2003 12:07 AM).]

Startime55
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17 posted 2003-08-30 12:07 PM


Powerfully Amazing...You draw one in to feel the heat and passion of your words. BRAVO!!

Ratleader
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18 posted 2003-08-30 12:31 PM


Been a while since I read a poem that's as downright sensual as this one, without coming out and saying it....

That be one lucky fella -- hope he knows it!

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gemjop
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19 posted 2003-08-30 07:32 AM




I'd forgotten about this. Though he is beautiful to watch, I have decided it's time to look at myself for a while.

Thankyou for taking the time to read.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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