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Bonnie j
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0 posted 2003-08-17 09:43 PM


A friend of mine wrote me a poem today about building me a chocolate factory. Also sending me a tooth faity to protect my teeth.The silly side of me jumped in and this is what I came up with.
Enjoy
Bon-Bon


He Says

He says he will build a factory.
It will be made of the finest chocolate.
Rich luscious strawberries will line the wall.
The nuts and bolts made of Godiva chocolate.
Pictures of Monet hanging upon the wall.
Made in intricate shades of chocolate.
He says he will send the tooth fairy.
To protect my pearlie whites.
I say,
“I have all my teeth of enameled beauty.”
But dear friends I did neglect to say.
Yes I do most certainly have all my pearlie whites-
“In A Jar.”

Love Bon-Bon

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1 posted 2003-08-17 10:03 PM


very charming and nice,,,

     


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2 posted 2003-08-17 10:07 PM


That last line is just so... perfect. It takes this wonderful write and sends it another direction...
Thanks for sahring it with us.

We are all equal but we’re individually different
and able to reach the impossible if we try.

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