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symphony_of_thoughts
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since 2003-08-03
Posts 95
Somewhere

0 posted 2003-08-16 06:38 PM



Impossible to be free from the world
Emotions backed up in traffic
Stuck in the midway without gas

No way to release these thoughts
Encaged thoughts without a key
Locked away never to be free

Impossible to retrieve
The bars are to close
The cage is too high

Thoughts that could be the antidote
The antidote curing life's troubles
In the cage is where they'll stay
Over the years, to turn black and grey

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littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
1 posted 2003-08-16 10:18 PM


but here, you have clicked the key in the lock of that cage . . .
nice write
xxoo

Minister Joe
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since 2003-02-22
Posts 78
TX, USA
2 posted 2003-08-16 10:59 PM


symphony,

Emotions backed up in traffic
Stuck in the midway without gas


This image was extremely evocative... something just sitting with some purpose to go somewhere and be somewhere--but prevented from doing so.  That's a nice parallel to draw between love that has been abandoned, or prevented from growing.

Thank you for this,

--Matt

    
[url=]Give what you have. To someone, it may be bet

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543
The Ravines
3 posted 2003-08-17 07:33 AM


I understand where you are coming from...this reminded me of one of my own writes. Thank you for sharing.
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