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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-08-15 10:44 AM



Gray Soul

You were a streak of color
against a graying soul
but have been cheated once more.
The heat of the times
wilting the voice of love,
the storm of excite
losing its strength.
The heart trailing the mind
never to know what is behind
the green door...


~~*~~


20 plus 1...again


to wake to a smiling face,
to lift the covers to the day
and watch your eyes following...
my dream addiction


~~*~~

nakdthoughtisms


I am your biggest fan
unveiled but not appreciated


empty me
and you will find
memories of you


my eyes read through you
and see your denial


you have to crawl before you walk
and walk before you run...
we never got beyond the lift


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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MARK V SHELDON
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1 posted 2003-08-15 10:52 AM


An appreciative to you, Maureen.  You've got some zingers today!  This one especially stood out for me:

you have to crawl before you walk
and walk before you run...
we never got beyond the lift

Don't ebb the flow...

-MVS

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angelblueyes
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2 posted 2003-08-15 10:55 AM


Maureen, these were very good.I always enjoy reading your writes
angelblueyes

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2003-08-15 11:00 AM


Thank you Mark. I wrote them a day or two ago when I was debating whether to post anymore...just little bits that would not let my brain rest.

and that last one...well I guess I was thinking of all those cliche's that don't fit my life. This one does.

I thank you for all those less thans that  were just collecting brain dust until you started posting yours.

grateful to you
M

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2003-08-15 11:01 AM


angelblueyes, thank you for your kind words and for your support.
You are appreciated
hugss
M

BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2003-08-15 01:31 PM


Oh Maureen, your writing is so beautiful,
each one of these is lovely.

I think I liked the nakdthougtisms most of all.

hugs M~

serenity blaze
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6 posted 2003-08-15 01:43 PM


I will stay away from the green door, for obvious reasons.

But loved the way you tossed these "unsupported bits" together--

sterling imagery and the emotion smacks.

A well tossed salad, lady.

Enjoyed.

Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-08-15 05:59 PM


all fantastic M
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 2003-08-15 07:03 PM


WynterFriend~

'empty me
and you will find
memories of you'


Oh my !
So very, very beautiful ... only nine words that speak volumes~

Not post ?  Not post ?
No way I'll let you pull THAT one off~
Love you girlie~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
9 posted 2003-08-18 10:29 AM


Lori, just  practicing  with words, while watching the sibling rivalry  

Do you think I  have coined a new word..and if so could it be mine without copywriting it?

thinking on it~
M


Karen, haaaa..you are funny!
I had gathered a few thoughts and didnt want to load the pages with 20's or less.
Some days I don't even support my own  worded bits.
Thank you


Aenimal, I appreciate your response thanks.


Marge, some days I think I have worn out my poetness..if that is such a word..and try to not think in rhyme or even non rhyme

but it always sneaks up on me and forces me to release it...
I am not good at choicing and just go with the flow...usually~
Thank you Marge
hugs
M


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