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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2003-08-15 09:13 AM



Syl-la-bles of You

I listened
as my words
were spoken by another
always in song,
but never ours.

I worshipped
the want of you,
embraced each moment
not realizing
that a part of me
was missing
the meaning of you.

It was in your voice
always
but the eyes held me,
captured the blue in me,
softening the past
connecting me to the now,
but never promising
tomorrow.

I wanted to be endorsed
have you underwrite me
pledging that my heart
was no longer
a testing ground,
but was subscribed to
by you.

So I break down
my syllables now...

words
al-ways  play-ing  in my head
each night lips  mov-ing
pray-ing  to make the next day
eas-i-er,
tuck-ing  my  feel-ings
be-tween  the lines
as I close my eyes
to  lov-ing   you
and let my words
sung by  oth-ers
lull me   in-to    yes-ter-day.

M


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (08-15-2003 09:39 AM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2003-08-15 09:18 AM


You successfully stress your feelings here dear Maureen.
It is so sad.
Wishing you to sing full voice, together in love.
Love, Margherita

bslicker
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2 posted 2003-08-15 10:10 AM



song sung by other's, even if your own words music still playing.

bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-08-15 10:16 AM


words
al-ways  play-ing  in my head
each night lips  mov-ing
pray-ing  to make the next day
eas-i-er,
tuck-ing  my  feel-ings
be-tween  the lines
as I close my eyes
to  lov-ing   you
and let my words
sung by  oth-ers
lull me   in-to    yes-ter-day.



Maureen, I really enjoyed reading this. That last
verse really made the words stand out. Very good
writing, Lady.  
Hugs  
Ethel

MARK V SHELDON
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4 posted 2003-08-15 10:20 AM


Maureen, your fresh metaphors really caught my attention in this one -- I especially liked:

I wanted to be endorsed
have you underwrite me

That's an obvious metaphor I've never come across before or even thought of using -- very crisp!  I could also feel the inspiration in this moving write.  Well said!

-MVS

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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
5 posted 2003-08-15 10:28 AM


Margherita,  yes  stressin' out my feelings but not ever sad, just writing~~
thanks
M
bslicker, that's right..I have the music flowing at least in my words

Ethel, words were meant to stand out in that verse..
I just couldn't get it to work without the hyphens


MARK,  I was writing, not sure why I thought about it like this..maybe I was thinking about my insurance bill sitting here...not yet paid ...and then endorsing a check I have here...funny  how that happens


Thank you
M

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