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I was wrong to think...

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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


0 posted 08-15-2003 02:47 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kaoru


even as i ride
a wild horse
along the tide..

its seems so lonely.

though i write
tragic towards you..
laughter,
caught between
salty teeth.

it becomes incredibly easy
to ignore
and to pretend
that i can float upon water.

that i can mend
everything with
missing peices.

i embed the stars
within .
i still talk to the sky aloud.

as though it understands
better than most..
if it even listens,
it does not dry my tears.

instict tells me
that you lied..
that the wall was never built,
merely a casual illusion cast.

as i was aside.

it was wrong of me to think
that
there was a horse to begin with..

that something perfect could
possibly exist
that my weak wrists could
withstand the drawing motion.

all this said
to a light polluted sky..
© Copyright 2003 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-15-2003 02:51 AM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

terrific penning n read,,,

     

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2 posted 08-15-2003 03:39 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Meghan, even though it's sad,
it's beautiful.
Hugs  
Ethel
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3 posted 08-15-2003 06:40 AM       View Profile for ctowen   Email ctowen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ctowen's Home Page   View IP for ctowen

Shadows of emotions are hard to figure out .....

          
           more so than the "real deal" sometimes.


        Keep both hands on the reins!!
Patricia
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4 posted 08-15-2003 06:49 AM       View Profile for Patricia   Email Patricia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Patricia

I could defintely relate to your words.  A sad but very honest and heartfelt write.

Patricia  
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Well, Meghan, you made me read this twice.  Once for the impact, the second time for a deeper understanding of the poem itself.  I like the way you concluded that there's no running away from a problem ... even if one has a horse of any kind...

Very well done.
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6 posted 08-15-2003 08:04 AM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

love this....especially the end lines...ice

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i embed the stars
within .
i still talk to the sky aloud.

as though it understands
better than most..

it is there for you always
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8 posted 08-15-2003 09:53 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

love reading your  poetry enjoy your words
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9 posted 08-15-2003 09:59 AM       View Profile for Lone Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Star

so sad...
The mood is as mine this day...


Deb...Lone Star


Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 08-15-2003 10:05 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

Meg,

This was brilliant!  I love every stanza...every word...every meaning...indeed it does not dry the tears...

Side Bar:  You made me want to go horseback riding..but for some reason I want to do it alone...on the beach.

I have come to love your words so, so much.

Susan
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11 posted 08-16-2003 02:18 AM       View Profile for eor   Email eor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for eor

at least the sky listens to every word you say unflinchingly, and takes it for hat each letter of each word is worth...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

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12 posted 09-04-2003 04:39 PM       View Profile for froggy   Email froggy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for froggy

I like this

:-)
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The scary thing? I wrote "Child becomes mermaid" well before reading this. There must be something in the air -- or the water.
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though i write
tragic towards you..
laughter,
caught between
salty teeth.

My heart thumped reading this , and some after i'd finished...damn woman, this could be one of your best, or the best.

instict tells me
that you lied..
that the wall was never built,
merely a casual illusion cast.

as i was aside.

it was wrong of me to think
that
there was a horse to begin with..

Can i just say how glad i am you came to live here at pip? the whole theme of this aches, the twists, i think, if i may, i'll print it n put it on my wall. puhleeeese?

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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15 posted 09-05-2003 11:39 AM       View Profile for angelblueyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelblueyes

This is so sad and longing, but only written with the beauty that you can give.
Crystal
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16 posted 02-22-2007 07:54 PM       View Profile for ChaoticHazeLight   Email ChaoticHazeLight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ChaoticHazeLight

Envious...  You're a beautiful person.  
 
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