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The Dragon's Gift
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The Dragon's Gift |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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The Dragon’s Gift if I stop my breath I hear him even on the other side or there behind the trees flat wings roar in the silence as he slants into view fallturns and shears across this mist of waterair scans through the mounds of it it is a cloud to him the change of pitch as he dips out I can go without breaking walk the water of this groundfog mirror if I follow through travel as he to both ends of real exist but I flinch as he turns too close it is no good I cannot I fall into the dirt and stars and he will turn turn fixed crystal eyes see all and nothing nothing and if I follow through is real there waiting someplace I will clasp to the knuckles fling elbows knees around wings around does he flinch as I turn too close hear me lead follow sight down my crystals blathering through the fog touch me quickly now before the amber sets lock that impression into me shape me now stay the stasis shadowed amber fill of light after this tiny green seal me touch me now make it last |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good write,, i enjoyed the read,,, |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome this is my talented friend. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
You've got to watch out for those dragons my friend! *smile* |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
lock that impression into me shape me now stay the stasis shadowed amber fill of light after this tiny green seal me touch me now make it last Ed, my friend, I do like this. I like the way you wrote it, with the repetition of some of the words. That really added to the meaning.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed... touch me quickly now before the amber sets "lock that impression into me shape me now stay the stasis shadowed amber fill of light after this tiny green seal me touch me now make it last" Ed has found a magic carpet of his own...with dizzy color, and a little crazy of fear. Wonderful imagery. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You touch so many levels of our being with this... fear, faith, despair, determination... and perhaps most of all... hope. *S* This shines with magnificent imagery... excellent work! *S* And this ending? *S* Simply superb... real is found. *S* touch me quickly now before the amber sets lock that impression into me shape me now stay the stasis shadowed amber fill of light after this tiny green seal me touch me now make it last |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...Came back to lock this into my library...it's one of your best, me thinks! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ed~ 'touch me quickly now before the amber sets lock that impression into me shape me now stay the stasis shadowed amber fill of light after this tiny green seal me touch me now make it last' Doesn't happen often ... but you've left me breathless with enjoy~ Awesome write, my poet friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
you are amazing, this really took me on that ride....wonderful! hugssss you L~ The way you move me |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Great write...didn't know you were a knight! reminds me of the movie Dragonheart! Thanks ~ARH |
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