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icebox
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since 2003-05-03
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in the shadows

0 posted 2003-08-14 12:00 PM



Tired broken soldier of the surf,
spirit battered
lying shattered in the sun,
the fight
the outrage at the storm,
the dreams undone;

others
sisters of the sun
brothers of the sand
may yet recall how valiantly you tried,
how helplessly you died,
weapons slashing at the foam
in the blinding crushing roar;

you've earned the peaceful
evening's tide of dreams;
sleep well child of the moon.

©2003 by icebox

© Copyright 2003 icebox - All Rights Reserved
Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
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the ass-end of space
1 posted 2003-08-14 01:00 AM


Immediately brings to mind the opening sequence of Saving private Ryan and The longest Day...so much for the glory of war..
excellent writing ice

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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2 posted 2003-08-14 01:22 AM


and with that? This lil soldier is going to go battle the pillows.

you dream sweet too.

par excellence, icebox...


passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2003-08-14 01:36 AM


*silent*
MoniDaPoet
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since 2003-08-14
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California, USA
4 posted 2003-08-14 01:41 AM


Absolutely beautiful. Great imagery! Bravo!
Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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Florida
5 posted 2003-08-14 04:55 PM


Icy~

You did it again..sigh...and I am always glad you do...this was sad, so sad, and so beautiful at the same time...

Susan

ecrivan
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my own state
6 posted 2003-08-16 12:57 PM


interesting contrasts, enjoyed


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