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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-08-12 12:21 PM



saccharine smiles,

this state is sugarcoated,

look at their costumes -
they wont even autumnize

no gold or crimson will adorn them,

they are stranded for now,
at time's mercy
like the rest of us,

victims of the veil between real love and illusion

see how their green palms enclose,
along sculpted gardens
and golden gated communities,

from whom do they fence themselves in, these folk?

the reaper will find his way through to them,

they are just temporary occupants
dipping in an illusionary fountain

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-12-2003 09:32 PM).]

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Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
1 posted 2003-08-12 01:27 PM


inkedgoddess - yep, they seem to live in an illusion...

BC

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
2 posted 2003-08-12 08:41 PM


Mish simply amazing writing..i adore this
bklynboy
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since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
3 posted 2003-08-12 09:11 PM


You gotta love the sunshine state....
QjQ
Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756
U.S.A.
4 posted 2003-08-12 10:27 PM


the reaper will find his way through to them,

very good lines,, enjoyed the read,,


     


garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-08-12 10:35 PM


Michele, this is a very well-written poem.....
Hugs  
Ethel

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