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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2003-08-12 09:53 AM


The summer sun falls quick behind westward mountains,
A full moon rises slowly shimmering on the East’s lake
Warm winds push the clouds back and night sky rushes in
Star shining plays peek a boo between the clouds as they break
Without the sun the air cools and mist seeps down mountains

The mist carries the lotus scenting soft with thoughts of you
A nightingale begins song hoping for a mate to come
The mist deep now hides the sky and fills the bamboo with dew
That slides gently down green dripping down like a soft drum
I’d play my flute in duet but the nightingale flew

Cooler winds bring clouds back filling the summer air
The thunder drum echoes and far off there’s sky flair
The winds picks up the fog and light rain begins to fall
Gone is scent song and sky the storm swallowed them all.

Gloom


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minoune
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1 posted 2003-08-12 09:55 AM


beautiful... could actually visualize this... but remember.. the sun will shine again... :0)))

minoune


LeeJ
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2 posted 2003-08-12 10:11 AM


I think we were looking at the same sky last eveing with similar emotions....smiles...this was brilliantly penned.
Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2003-08-12 12:04 PM


I read this twice because the words had such a sweet, sad, feeling as they seeped into my mind...I loved it Gloomy one!

Susan

Professor Gloom
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4 posted 2003-08-12 12:38 PM



Thank you, minoune,
Pleased you liked it and visually enjoyed,
We’re getting by with a bit of sun in the afternoon
But much gray skies.

Thank you, LeeJ,
This is actually not my true vision,
But a mixture of mine and
Wang Wie’s poem about summer by a lake in China;
Having little emotion myself I often use Chinese poetry for inspiration
Glad you enjoyed

Thank you, Susan
Your pleasure taken from my words returns pleasure in pleasing to me
(I always wrap my head in plastic wrap, it stops the seepage)

Gloom

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5 posted 2003-08-12 01:03 PM


you always take me with you
Professor Gloom
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6 posted 2003-08-12 01:04 PM


Thank you, passing shadows
you are always invited along
pleased you enjoyed

Gloom

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