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Undying Pain

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Tequilia_Sunrise
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Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada


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Like a dagger in my stomach,
like a Million Needles in my heart,
but a billion times worse.
this pain will kill me if kept unattained,
this pain will be my undoing.

The sweet sound of a once beautiful voice,
now a screeching yearning in my heart.
the pain tightens,
the pain never lets up,
the pain rushes through my every pore.

Only one cure has been found,
one possible solution,
in which cannot be overlooked;
esle I will die.

this in truth can only be done,
by one who gives much joy.
© Copyright 2003 Amanda Seymour - All Rights Reserved
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where the wild flowers grow


1 posted 08-12-2003 06:54 PM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Can't believe this has no replies!

Awesome write, doll.. just great..full of feeling, and I do understand.
Gabriel Frost
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Between midnight thoughts


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Stunning. Quite expressive. I think this may benefit from a rhyme pattern though. Sounds good in free verse, but its anice experiment to try
Tequilia_Sunrise
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thankx everyone for your lovely comments
 
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