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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-08-10 10:49 AM



I see his disdain in the mirror
staring back
with arrows of accusation

Who is he?
His eyes implore me
what does he want me to see?

Backwards fall
symbolic stall
I learn to crawl

Suffocating air
reverbrating blare
I pretend no care

He follows me
He sees my mind
knows the abstract design

I need to shake
this never ending ache
of my own make

Guilt knows no vacation
it is my station
even as I reach for salvation

© Copyright 2003 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
angelblueyes
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1 posted 2003-08-10 10:51 AM


WOW!!A deep write here and I hear you in this.Congrats on your 100th post
angelblueyes

Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-08-10 11:04 AM



...[8 months to the 1000th post...]

But look how you do it,
          so very well, indeed!

icebox
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in the shadows
3 posted 2003-08-10 12:24 PM


It is hard to release something carried for a long time; it always makes me feel out of balance.

I like this poem.  Thank you for sharing it.

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-08-10 12:39 PM


Angel~Thank you so much for your kind words.

Karilea~You are the kindest women I know.  I blush at your flattery.

Icy~I missed you!  Out of balance indeed..I have gotten very good at turning away from the mirror before I see a reflection...

Susan

BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2003-08-10 12:48 PM


I need to shake
this never ending ache
of my own make

Aww, but you write the ache so well,
and the wavering within.

Congrats on your 1000th post Susan~

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-08-10 12:54 PM


Thank you Bluesy!
serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-08-10 04:04 PM


A fine little treatise on the patriarchal archetype.

Er...well, that's how I saw it anyway. *wink*

(No need to page Freud, I just analyze MYSELF.)

Congratulations, Susan!

I look forward to many more.


Kethry
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8 posted 2003-08-10 05:43 PM


Congratulations on the 1000. Sorry to hear it's sadness that has brought you to this point. However, there is hope I started with an ache I couldn't except by writing and look at me now. I've moved on but I'm still writing.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



icebox
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in the shadows
9 posted 2003-08-10 06:08 PM


Ah...well I suppose it is better no to cast a reflection.  *grin*
QjQ
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10 posted 2003-08-10 06:22 PM


congrat's on 1,000

enjoyed your penning,,,

    


Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2003-08-11 01:34 PM


Karen~LOL I do the same!  And when is the best time to analyze oneself?  At night when you're all alone, when no one can see the weakness of tears....

Kethry~My ache or guilt, as in this piece, is only from time to time, I won't allow it more recognition then that...otherwise I really am at a much happier place...Thank you for reading.

Icy~LOL that was what I was going to type at first then changed my mind..ignored reflection or no reflection?  It's a toss up according to the day...Thank you for returning.  

QJQ~Thank you so much!

Susan

Cpat Hair
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12 posted 2003-08-12 08:34 AM


nicely done Susan... and congrats on the thousand posts..


Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 2003-08-12 08:41 AM


Thank you Ron.
Patricia
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14 posted 2003-08-12 08:43 AM


Congrat on your 1000th post!  I must say I have been on this trip before (the guilt trip) courtesy of a "he."  Now I'd rather lounge around the house than to take that trip again.

A great write!

Patricia

[This message has been edited by Patricia (08-12-2003 08:47 AM).]

Kaoru
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15 posted 2003-08-12 12:34 PM


Wonderful write, Susan.

I even enjoyed the title quite a bit.

Congrats on your 1,000th, by the by.

passing shadows
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16 posted 2003-08-12 12:58 PM


Susan, don't feel bad...we all have lives to live...

I remember a time that I kicked out a thousand in like three weeks...sad thing

some would call it addiction

great write, btw!

Congrats!

Professor Gloom
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17 posted 2003-08-12 01:09 PM


Nice write,
especially like the flow toward the end.
Congratulations on the milestone
Not sure how long it took me,
Milestones look long in coming, quick in passing

Gloom

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