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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-08-10 12:31 PM



The Elements’ Eternal Dance

you keep me
up past midnight
grabbing at velvet
skipping stars

I am the dragon
forming from the mists
woven
through your secret dreams
in search
of passion's fire

can I believe
in the water
in my hand
flow of clear
the slip
the tender drip

I am the forest
the scent
of ancient mysteries
the moonlight
trickled
on the path
that led you
to this
deep sweet pool

I could be
ballet shoes
and you
could be music
in the air

I am the breeze
a comfortable disguise
storm’s simple leading edge
skipping
in lazy circles
belying the power
of the skies
lightly
filling the song bird’s
life
with gentle melodies

we could dance
fluid movements
I stand
on my toes
to reach you

I am the wind
tearing
at the trees
swirling in place
laughing
in paroxysms
of elemental passions
where earth
and wind
collide



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Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-08-10 12:46 PM


WOW.. I'm so in awe right now.. what a perfect pair, a perfect poem..

damn, this is just..amazing..

passing shadows
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2 posted 2003-08-10 02:57 AM


mouth hanging open with nothing coming out
Kethry
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3 posted 2003-08-10 05:19 AM


So elemental...so beautiful

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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4 posted 2003-08-10 07:51 AM


This sounds like a happy dance....and a pairing of two of PIP's best! An excellent duet -- irresistable.

Good work, icebox! Good work, Slick one! You two make a good combo.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-08-10 08:45 AM


Excellent work both of you!

Susan

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6 posted 2003-08-10 08:54 AM


Your words dance down the page...fantastic!
I am at a loss for words at the moment..
Please..please...du-et again?!
~Summertime Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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7 posted 2003-08-10 10:30 AM


I was trying to highlight my favorite part... but I just kept collecting line after line, verse after verse. *S* This is a wonderful duet... two of my favorites produced a seamless collaboration! *S*
Martie
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8 posted 2003-08-10 10:33 AM


Wonderful duet...magical, yet earthy.  Much enjoyed!
Margherita
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Eternity
9 posted 2003-08-10 10:36 AM


A very enjoyable dance!
You are both kissed passionately by the muse!
Love, Margherita

Aenimal
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10 posted 2003-08-10 04:09 PM


Well worth the wait..simply great writing
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11 posted 2003-08-10 04:12 PM


Beautiful!

I just love when my people harmonize!

and two of my favorite poets, too.

may I be greedy and clamour for more?

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