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symphony_of_thoughts
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since 2003-08-03
Posts 95
Somewhere

0 posted 2003-08-09 05:06 PM




I lie awake
In my country suburb
Wishing I could go
To the place that never sleeps

To hear the man play on the street, with his unique beat
Quiet clinging of quarters being flung
Into his red, velvet case as he plays
Midnight bustle surrounds

I see the late night cafe' windows
Man with black hat on stage
Poetry spewed out with raw feeling
Quiet clapping, bongos tapping

Taxis rushing to my side
Take me anywhere, over there
Hard concrete tapping a beat
Right under my feet

Smoking fog like a midnight blanket
Night time and not day
I would do it my way, I gladly say
See the unknown elements

Explore the unheard thoughts
The man alone in the subway
Midnight and beyond
Take me away

To a place that I've never seen
To a place that lies awake under my dreams
Where street lights and signs break the darkness
Like a wild fire disrupting the pitch black of night

Take me to that place
And I'll take it at my own pace


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Ankaria
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since 2003-07-26
Posts 35
Sask. Canada
1 posted 2003-08-09 05:14 PM


Oh that was awesome! I loved the feeling! So.. artistic and mellow. I loved the feeling it gave me, made me think I was at the fringe festival sitting around with the buskers. I look forward to reading much more of your work.

Ankaria
   "Is all we see or seem, but a dream within a dream?"
                   -Edgar Allen Poe

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
2 posted 2003-08-10 04:58 AM


This might be a good idea (It's certainly a good piece) except no sleep leads to madness. Why else do you think everyone in the city is mad?
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



aujussy wolf
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3 posted 2003-08-10 11:22 PM


excellent work ,you nabbed that mystic city glow ... the unknown calling

wolfy

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-08-11 12:07 PM


This is very good writing.
I really enjoyed reading it.
Hugs  
Ethel

passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2003-08-11 04:18 AM


yeah! i feel this too! Let's go!
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