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(there ain't no fun without you now...so I guess I'll sleep)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 08-09-2003 07:43 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Quietly
I roll it down
the colors of my laughing legs
weary feet
to wriggle free--
beneath the black of pantyhose
cherry red
of sparkling
painted on
the nails of toes--

I should not have danced last night.
The back is bad and I've grown old.

Where's my pillow?
Grant me sleep.
may my mind tell stories bold--
flicker frames upon the lids
of my eyes
I shed the clothes
spray the sheets with bergamot
and hum the tunes of Norah Jones
as I pray this silent prayer--

that I might dance in my dreams--
begging Gods I'll find you there.


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-09-2003 07:53 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 08-09-2003 08:09 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Shoot...and I just got here.
Enjoyed...as always!
ice
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2 posted 08-09-2003 08:15 AM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

Serenity...
This poem is sensuous and yet sad at the same time, to bad this guy didn't follow you home...I know I would have tried......:-)
The poem has great form and rolls off the lips in fine rhythm, I like the line about spraying the sheets with bee-balm.
Perhaps to sooth the stings of consciousness, and allow you to dance more freely in your dreams?
*******ice*******

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3 posted 08-09-2003 09:09 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Beautiful writing serenity, I really enjoyed the read

Andy
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4 posted 08-09-2003 09:25 AM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

K . . . wishing you sweet dreams Lady . . .
always and awaking to my own creaking bones . . . *smile*
xxoo
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5 posted 08-09-2003 12:14 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

my anthem...

cept -- I'm old enough -- sleep IS fun
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6 posted 08-09-2003 01:53 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

dancing, wherever, is always good
Susan Caldwell
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"painted on
the nails of toes--"

Mine are red at the moment as well...

"spray the sheets with bergamot"

Bee balm?? What is that?  And why don't I know about it??

"and hum the tunes of Norah Jones"

Norah....sigh...got to love Norah...she was here in June and I didn't have anyone to go with...next time I am giving you a call Karen!!

Beautiful writing...sad, lonely and still the love of old holds on...

I feel you and send loving comfort your way..
Susan

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Oh geesh!  Here I go...love to dance.
And, whether it be in dreams or while awake
the toes must have paint of cherry red!
Wonderful write...much enjoyed.
~Summertime smiles, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


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Karen...this just weeps of emptiness...I felt every word.

May your dreams hold all the answers to your prayers.  

Dance...

Love you, lady..

"My friends are my estate."
~Emily Dickinson

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10 posted 08-09-2003 03:49 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

Karen..I pray you do...sweet dreams

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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11 posted 08-09-2003 03:59 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Karen, are you awake now? Hello???

I loved this poem, SereneOne, and I felt it, too.
It had a longing in it for someone....I do hope
that you found the someone in your dreams..
Hugs, my friend  
Ethel
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12 posted 08-09-2003 05:21 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Wake up "twinkle toes"!!  Let's get all gussied up and go out and paint the town the same colour as our toenails! Shake your groove thing yaa yaaaaaa!!!
Whew! Sorry, I don't know what came over me. I find strange things happen to my being when I read your writing Karen. But..that's a good thing.....ain't it? Love this. hugs to you, Chris
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13 posted 08-09-2003 06:22 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice writing...James
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I don't know what to say so I'll hug you

There's nothing as unbreakable as the bond between an Arabian and her person

Bill Charles
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15 posted 08-09-2003 07:36 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

serenity blaze - you write well ye swamp witch...

BC
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16 posted 08-09-2003 07:37 PM       View Profile for SharaRose   Email SharaRose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SharaRose

Norah Jones is amazing...and so is your vivid thoughts for the pause at the end of your day.

SharaRose @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

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17 posted 08-09-2003 09:28 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

sighs and smiles.

Guess who went out last night?

After the third shot of cuervo, I forgot all about my broken tooth. After the fifth? I forgot about the busted bone in me arse. Then after I lost count altogether, a biker friend "dipped" me while dancing, and it all came back to me. *wince*

SO....guess who is back in retirement tonight?

And yes, I missed my baby too. (sneak attack, madviking )

And next time I go looking for my heart's desire, I think I'll go looking in my own hardrive.



Thanks for reading, and pass me the aspirin please...

sigh. I really am too old for this shtuff.
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18 posted 08-09-2003 10:34 PM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Serenity... I hope you had sweet dreams.
You've got to quit hanging out with those biker guys, all the want to do is get you drunk and take you for a ride on their Harley...LOL...Paul

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19 posted 08-09-2003 11:55 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

smile

I missed you too

but I am glad
that you were treated like a queen
somewhere
other than your computer

smiling you
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20 posted 08-10-2003 10:04 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

as I pray this silent prayer--

that I might dance in my dreams--
begging Gods I'll find you there.

And did you? *S* Ah, lady... what a picture laughing legs paints... and then to end with this longing we all know. *S* Excellent!!!
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21 posted 08-10-2003 10:38 AM       View Profile for angelblueyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelblueyes

Sad, but beautiful.By the way I love Norah Jones passing you the aspirin.
angelblueyes
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22 posted 08-10-2003 12:29 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Oh my witch,

This tugs, it does...*smile*


~yeti
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23 posted 08-10-2003 12:34 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

Without women, there would be few bright lights in the world of men.

Sorry you have to push this lesson so hard to learn it, but who amongst us has not said, "Never again god, if you please just get me through this."  

I had a friend long ago who wrote on the bottom of his toilet seat "Welcome back fool" just to remind him that he had been hugging the bowl before.

At least you apparently made it home; I woke up (came to) once on a train hundreds of miles from home.  Some "friends" thought it would be funny.

It is a good poem and well written; thank you for sharing it.
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Smiling at you, serenity...and how you can laugh at the pieces of your life, and still, make the ache so real and human.  Thats one of the many reasons why so many find you amazing.
 
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