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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-08-09 12:52 PM



Like a check book that doesn't balance

Four thousand minus two

I am often overdrawn

adding up my fees

going deeper into debt

pretending to pass you off

while trying to stop payment

I have entered in my numbers

tapping into my reserve  

depositing more than I can afford

digging in my pocket

only to withdraw

I have looked in every window

in hopes to buy the perfect gift

I have taken stock and lost

counting up my samll change

just to spend my days on you

like penny candy for your thoughts

and more than I had bargained for

so many things we could have been

oh let me count the ways

how I love to write you

summed up, minus two~

Make that 3999~  Really, I can count!      


[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (08-09-2003 03:58 AM).]

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ecrivan
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1 posted 2003-08-09 12:56 PM


congradulations, may you write many more..debt free though

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (08-09-2003 12:56 AM).]

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
2 posted 2003-08-09 01:21 AM


Seems there is always a catch and a price to pay.  Guess it depends on the interest rate.     No matter how many times I have said I'm not buying it, it makes a world of difference when we know the score up front.

Thank you ecrivan~

wranx
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3 posted 2003-08-09 02:06 AM


Yes, and within those 4,000 is an awful lot of heart....Congrats Bluesy!

(But we should congratulate ourselves for having you around here)

You ARE the assets

Ed

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
4 posted 2003-08-09 02:26 AM


You're full of surprises wranx~  
Gee thanks, that was really nice of you.

Oh, hug!

EagleOne
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5 posted 2003-08-09 03:53 AM


3998, and every one a gem!

We live an' learn from our mistakes
The deepest cuts are healed by faith ~ All Fired Up, P.Giraldo, M.Grombacher & K.Tolhurst

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
6 posted 2003-08-09 04:36 AM


Are you referrring to a cubic zirconium or a precious jewel?  
It's ok, don't answer.  

Thank you, thank you EagleOne~

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-08-09 05:05 AM


very good write, kept me till the end...and congrats on your 4000 mark!
Sunshine
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8 posted 2003-08-09 08:12 AM



Well, you're already at 4019, so does that make you overdrawn?  

Congrats, Bluesy...you DO have a way about you!

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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9 posted 2003-08-09 09:45 AM


Bluesy . . . and every one worth the cost indeed . . .
*checking own pockets for change*
Congratulations!  Please . . .
dont ever stop singing . . .
tweets
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (08-09-2003 09:45 AM).]

Marge Tindal
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10 posted 2003-08-09 10:51 AM


BluesSerenade~
Creatively penned~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Earth Angel
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11 posted 2003-08-09 12:41 PM


This poem is cute, witty, and charming--just like you, Dear Lori!

Kudos!--not only on the number of your posts--but on the quality of them!


Linda

Magnus
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12 posted 2003-08-09 01:25 PM


Lori,  congratulations and I know the feel
of this poem.  Well done.

Enchantress
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13 posted 2003-08-09 03:08 PM


Congratulations Lori!
And a great poem to mark this milestone!
~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

Ankaria
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14 posted 2003-08-09 03:32 PM


Haha this was delightful and fun. I love your work, keep writing! p.s. good luck on your 4000th!

Ankaria
   "Is all we see or seem, but a dream within a dream?"
                   -Edgar Allen Poe

garysgirl
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15 posted 2003-08-09 03:46 PM


Lori, congratulations, sweet friend, on your 4,000 post.
I have enjoyed every poem of yours that I've read,
as well as every reply. You remind me of myself in
your sensitivities. You are a very sweet, and
sincere friend to have, Lori. Thanks for being mine.  
Hugs  

Ethel
A rose to you, Lady    

Duncan
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16 posted 2003-08-09 04:10 PM


"like penny candy for your thoughts

and more than I had bargained for

so many things we could have been

oh let me count the ways

how I love to write you

summed up, minus two~"


I'm baaaaack.....  
I think it's four plus ten.  Would that be one plus ten there?  Does anybody really know what time it is?
Sorry, I needed a fix.  
I'll give you a yell in a few...

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
17 posted 2003-08-09 05:49 PM


BluesSerenade - congrats on the almost 4000...

BC

Martie
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18 posted 2003-08-09 08:29 PM


Lori

It's not the numbers, but the heart, and I know yours is priceless.  

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
19 posted 2003-08-09 09:09 PM


Thanks Dixie Darlin' for always taking the time to read me.

Karilea~ I was overdrawn to begin with.     
Thank you for your nice reply.

Tweets~ Nope, I won't ever stop as long as you are here
to sing along with me.  You're so sweet.

Hi there Marge~ Sometimes I wonder where I come up with this stuff.
One thought seems to lead to another.  Thank you for reading.

Linda~ No one ever told me I was charming.
You be my first!!!     Hugs~

Barry~ Thank you for sharing the feeling.  
I appreciate it very much.

Nancy~  the beach was so beautiful today,
just like the warmth of your summertime smiles.
I'm so happy to see you here, and thanks.

Ankaria~ I am glad this got a haha out of you,
because I had lots of fun writing it.  

Ethel~  Thank you for the rose and every little thing you said.  Hugs~

Duncan~     Just call me Ms. Fix it!  Yea right.
A book keeper I'm not, but I do take notes.
I'm glad you're back, I missed ya.

BC~  Thanks for stopping in and sharing the moment.

Dear Martie~ You are all heart and so right on the mark.
Thank you always.

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