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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Silenced thoughts cut me short I’ve locked the door, and thrown away the key. and won’t come out. The stone pigeons are dead- I dropped them from the rooftop and watched them crumble no wrong was done and yet- caught within these bars are iron. Shut away for my own good? It’s for the ‘sane’ ones to decide but no one touches me here, inside my head Breath turns to stone, and you don’t know what goes on inside Let me sleep I am awake- where you can’t see me I breathe I smile I whisper All in vain Stone won’t last forever just ask the dust by the street- once my conscious thoughts (feeling a little dark today  )insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (08-07-2003 07:32 PM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...powerful words. Eric |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
liz- another beautifully dark poem here...i loved it all the way thru loving these lines quote: riley * the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes * |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ah, Wind, your thoughts are deep and make me wonder how you are. Okay I hope. This really got to me. hugs, Chris  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Liz, this is wonderful poetry! When darkness gives birth to such gems, we might even welcome it. Love, Margherita  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Eric- err..whatever you say Riley- thanks...thanks a lot bunny Nightshade no..I'm not okay. I'm completely insane you've got to read my signature..and don't worry. I'm just..I'm just..uptightMargherita- darkness should always be welcomed. It is a pity that poetry so sad and beautifull should be locked away because it is disturbing. lol..I'm disturbing and they don't lock ME away...oh wait.. insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (08-07-2003 11:05 AM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Stone won’t last forever just ask the dust by the street- once my conscious thoughts i l$ve when you do dark, not that you feel it but how well you write it |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I wandered away from the dark but found my way back in thanks Raphyinsanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahhh Liz these are awesome lines . . . no one touches me here, inside my head scary in there, aint it? xxoo |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
fabulous write,,,, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
LW- no...not really. it tends to be bizzare and kind of 'educational' QJQ- thank you insanity is not a crime |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
You write like an angel but from a place deep within that seems filled with darkness. Hope all is well ... hugs, Marti |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I've mentioned and I'll stick to it..dark is good very very good  & whose sane anyways???  just as long as I have my thoughts and some playdoh I don't care what other ppl think & I'm fine..haha urrggh loved this If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (08-08-2003 04:08 PM).] |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Hello liz, This m dear is oh soooo good. I've read it about 10 times now, and each time i find something new in it. keep em coming. me likessssssssss Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahahaha awesome response Liz LMAO yes indeed it is . . . |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great writing that I enjoyed incredibly, what more can I say? Keep on posting this wonderful work Andy |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Stone won’t last forever just ask the dust by the street- once my conscious thoughts" ~ Your thoughts, conscious or otherwise, are pure gold!--never stone, l'il darlin'!   EA |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Hey, Riley picked my favorite lines, as well! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I do love your dark feelings |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Liz, I'm thinking that with your talent, you can write anything you feel like writing...whether it's dark...happy...romantic...or any other emotion. You put yourself into it and go with it. You are good, little friend....VERY GOOD!!!! Hugs and love, little lady  Ethel |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I can't believe I didn't comment on this.. I'm horrible!  *smack me*I love this, can I save it? I think I will, yes yes.. I will, even if you say no. |
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ShadowRaven Member
since 2003-08-13
Posts 51 |
Wonderful! Loved it! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
no one touches me here, inside my head Stone won’t last forever just ask the dust by the street- Enjoyed this very much Wind Maree fate is not just whose cooking smells good but which way the wind blows (Ani DiFranco) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-27-2003 02:10 AM).] |
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