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Martie
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Spirit Cloud

What is rain     mother
asked the sparrow’s child
long after the time of the last flood

I will show you said earth

gather me a spirit cloud
within my water jar
be careful not to spill for the well is dry

let it fill from the meaning of drink
until it is puffed and important

let it fly from your hand like balloons
in every color to amuse the sky

then as it rest over the tops of trees long gone
it will pierce your neglect with an arrow of fire

when the dry lake and river run gold
its burst will be felt

and you will know the meaning
of rain
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8-9-02

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-06-2003 07:57 PM       View Profile for littlewing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for littlewing

Jesus Marti . . .
this one gave me goosebumps
maybe it is me but my God . . .
this feeling of impending rain
and the way you presented it
is quite amazing
xxoo
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2 posted 08-06-2003 07:59 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

A sense of teaching, but also a sense of seeking, seeking something that might never be found, or that might be just -- there, waiting for you to see.

A heartfelt walk on tiptoe, along the edge of the edge of the other side....beautiful.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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3 posted 08-06-2003 09:14 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Martie, this is so beautiful.
I love the way you do this.  
Hugs  
Ethel
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I remember...
and it is as poignant
a read now
as it was then...

ah girl, your gifts...
are so bountiful.
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MartieSis~
Such a spiritual *gifting* you have~
This found me ... drenching me in remember of a beautiful spirit who now dances in my rain~

Me WUB U !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 08-08-2003 04:00 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ahhhh... I'd missed this gem. *S* And it is that. *S*
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let it fly from your hand like balloons
in every color to amuse the sky

Martie sweet lady, this is so beautiful. Going into my library it is. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Martie, I am serious, you would make a lot of money if you wrote young children's picture books like this.  I used to have many hundreds, and I'm a fussy buyer.  When we moved, I gave hundreds away.

Now I have about a hundred favorites left, each one beloved by my children, and now waiting for grandchildren to read to.  I'd buy yours in a second.   There is magic in your words, my friend.
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Yes Marti, much talent and tenderness in your words. Perfect for us kids of all ages.
TD
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when the dry lake and river run gold
its burst will be felt

Your poetry is so full of meaning Martie, and I am so grateful to have the opportunity to read the beauty that spills from your words.  Truly~
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11 posted 08-09-2003 08:37 AM       View Profile for ice   Email ice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ice

Yes, yes, Martie, you have captured the importance of rain in this poem. Being a landscaper in the east, I have had battle with it this spring and all summer, yet I never curse it....have been through to many long bouts without it..Love the language in this poem, that rings of first nation influence, and how it moves my emotions..great job...ice
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exceptional lines>
"let it fill from the meaning of drink
until it is puffed and important"


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wisdom

pours
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13 posted 08-10-2003 02:50 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Woah..

when it rains it pours,
you've just made my night.

Library.
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uh....

wow
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Martie - what a powerful poem - wow images and feelings that just are hard to express other than WOW - loved this - Paul
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Martie, you speak of things such as the rain here in ways that I could never imagine.You are a angelic soul.
angelblueyes
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!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is very cool!!!!!!!!!!!

...ahem...OK, I will be more serious.  This is a nice presentation of the building and urgency of rain.

*smile*
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