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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Wandering the rim a slumberless fool I feel hills' hesitation to fall to fall for ocean when its deep and troubled layers call Still my arms are set to dive knowing I am alive in you Like singing into a chasm I echo me again and again chained to a tree yet clamoring to be free to fly I am the other side of the moon that is cut in half Some nights when there is too much too much quiet too much breathing I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel and it all makes perfect sense when the grass no longer holds the sun and the cement is made of pearls but it is so deep and far to where you are On the rim I wander feeling the pull of your tide wanting the rush the holding of breath I would jump but I am chained to this tree and to me [This message has been edited by Martie (08-06-2003 05:23 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Which part, my dear should I read back to you... the ones that touch my heart? If that were to be, then I would read this in soft voice 10 times 10 and would still be moved... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok, now I will just ditto sunshine... and go back to reread....wow...incredible poetry posted today..... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - you're words are very touching... BC |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Touching, indeed. This had so much feeling sewn into it.. Great write.  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - powerful poetry for a special poet - you write it so well and so full of feeling and so full of amazing images - thanks - Paul |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel And I'd tear the flesh from me... but there still stands that tree. *S* This one touched so many heartchords... Beautiful work! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I can't improve on what Sunshine said: "Which part, my dear should I read back to you... the ones that touch my heart? If that were to be, then I would read this in soft voice 10 times 10 and would still be moved..." This bass singer will perform Sotto Voce for at least that long, before this poem leaves my screen....or I may print it out and lay it in front of the CRT so it stays around for as long as I want.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am the other side of the moon that is cut in half Some nights when there is too much too much quiet too much breathing I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel and it all makes perfect sense when the grass no longer holds the sun and the cement is made of pearls but it is so deep and far to where you are On the rim I wander feeling the pull of your tide wanting the rush the holding of breath ========================= *shaking my head* IWIHWT!!!! My dear poetess of exception....... there are no chains, no fences, no boundries when you write... every time you put pen to paper..you write your name across the sky. This is such a achingly beautiful heart on sleeve write. nothing left to say but..*sigh*  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
"I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel" "and to me" Well, I can't wish I had written this...because, I am incapable. I'll leave it for you do. Ed |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie...Very touching poem. Stay strong and hold on to that tree you are chained to. Thanks for sharing your heart with us...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Martie, A wondrous write.Your heart and soul will flow as smooth as your words.For you are the light looming out of the irradescent sky. angelblueyes |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Some nights when there is too much too much quiet too much breathing I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel Martie, this makes me speechless, it's so beautiful....  Hugs  Ethel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Tonight I'm taking a second look at some poetry I've read recently, that affected me in a particularly strong way.....I think this is one of the best and clearest that I've read in a while, and I appreciated it more now than the first time I read it. Something about it is just so strong, though understated as always. Just excellent -- thanks again for it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel" *smile* Perhaps it is good that I do not sleep much. I am glad this popped up; I missed it while I was preoccupied. You are an extraordinary poet! Thank you for sharing. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Martie, You have the ability to touch the universal plane, again and again. I admire that. And on that plane, this reaches a place you have never been, but it is like you are standing there with me. That's a gift, you know. Please continue to use it wisely. Kraw' |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Some nights when there is too much too much quiet too much breathing I understand dreams are making patterns like flame’s shadows they are more and less than real and at the time they are everything I feel I liked that verse too, I concur. Heck, I liked it all. I know this sounds trite, but you do have a way of moving and shaking the board...and leaving a gentle feel after reading you. Martie~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Martie, your talent inspires me |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
really a nice one |
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