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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-08-06 02:39 PM

Unbreak Me

moons have passed
and I still
hear your pain
in silence
do you think
I do not know
               I run to
               the rain as
               a hiding place
               for my tears
               tranquil violence
               for a heart
how can you
hold someone’s soul
to feel them
rush you by
lingering on breeze
               I ache in hush
               holding nothing
               but the loneliness
               left with being
               a weaver woven
               in reverse
quiet lace unraveled
leaving bare threads
dangling unstrung
how much more
can be taken
               unbreak me
               please unbreak me
               and maybe
               once again we
               can both
               be whole

"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

1 posted 2003-08-06 02:48 PM

Helen,

This was outstanding...I am so enjoying what you have been posting....

Susan C.

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

2 posted 2003-08-06 02:48 PM

awsome. I really mean it. this is beautifull

insanity is not a crime

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2003-08-06 02:50 PM

smile.

Even in the myth of Pandora, there was hope left in the box.

You just spoke that to me.

thank you

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-08-06 02:57 PM

Helen, though this is sad, it is so beautiful.
This part really touched my heart.....

               I ache in hush
               holding nothing
               but the loneliness
               left with being
               a weaver woven
               in reverse
quiet lace unraveled
leaving bare threads
dangling unstrung
how much more
can be taken

Hugs to you, sweet lady

Ethel

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

5 posted 2003-08-06 09:50 PM

Breaking

My heart
can never break,
can't be crushed or battered.
What would be the use? You can't break
gravel.

A beautiful piece of writing, Helen.....and no, you can't unring the bell, but there are other things that can be done.....as you know so well.

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PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

6 posted 2003-08-07 09:51 AM

I've read a few of your poems now and although this is the first to which I am posting a reply, one thing is clear - you have a beautiful way of letting your emotions flow out in your words and the imagery you set for yourself and your readers. Thank you for sharing.

Jeff

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

7 posted 2003-08-07 09:58 AM

Beautiful.
Eric

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2003-08-08 03:24 AM

Jesus . . . this is brillaint

the ultimate goal . . .
xxoo

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

9 posted 2003-08-08 02:35 PM

she is
the wounded
healer
standing
in
sand

[This message has been edited by Local Rebel (08-08-2003 02:44 PM).]

Lexia
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 111
Nowhere

10 posted 2003-08-08 02:40 PM

This is a really strong poem, evoking a lot of feelings. Good work.

Lex

You may only be one person to the world, but you may also be the world to one person.

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