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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2003-08-06 01:41 PM





What rings in the vastness beyond?
Church bells strike the hour
Chimes at dusk, such vivid power
To chill the summer subtle frost

Transported to the green grass knoll
Quiet places fill and overflow my soul
Beside the trickle of running streams
Where I sow my heart back at the seems

Wept to rocks, wept to rocks

My haven, as the moon climbs blue
Another turn away discerned to fickle through
That draws my seas to surface cheek
In flush escaped this twilight meek

Could I be others buried consecrated ground?
Your fingers seem to scatter me in little drifts
Second chances rendered deeper
Than the dust there lifts

Rain to blooms, rain to blooms

Copyright Kkh 8/6/03

[This message has been edited by ThisDiamond (08-06-2003 01:42 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2003-08-06 01:55 PM


TD

Deep and layered...always beautiful, you are!

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2 posted 2003-08-06 01:59 PM


My haven, as the moon climbs blue
Another turn away discerned to fickle through
That draws my seas to surface cheek
In flush escaped this twilight meek

Could I be others buried consecrated ground?
Your fingers seem to scatter me in little drifts
Second chances rendered deeper
Than the dust there lifts

Rain to blooms, rain to blooms
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Well this is just stunning...
the imagery and personification is poetry in motion. Was a treat to read aloud.
Excellent write poetess TD

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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3 posted 2003-08-06 02:11 PM


"wept to rocks, wept to rocks"

The rhythm of this is mesmerizing, and illustrates the tranquility....

and then,

"rain to blooms, rain to blooms"

delicate and oh-I-love the form of this'n.


QjQ
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4 posted 2003-08-06 03:15 PM


excellent write,,,




Patricia
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5 posted 2003-08-06 07:13 PM


TD...words cannot express the impact of your words upon me.  I am keeping this verse...and I am going to print it as soon as I finish this reply.  I hope you do not mind.  This is truly, truly wonderful!  

Can you tell how much I love this?

Patricia

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6 posted 2003-08-06 07:53 PM


ThisDiamond...This is a pwerful piece that really seems to touch the soul and beyond. Beautifully written and beautifully expressed. ***Ivy Rose
littlewing
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7 posted 2003-08-06 07:58 PM


Kathleen . . . I do believe this is your best . . . that I have read thus far

the sing - songy rhythm and rhyme
is perfection!
xxoo

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8 posted 2003-08-06 09:29 PM


Transported to the green grass knoll
Quiet places fill and overflow my soul
Beside the trickle of running streams
Where I sow my heart back at the seems


Kathleen, this is so beautiful. I love
to read your poetry, Lady.  
Hugs  
Ethel


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9 posted 2003-08-06 09:35 PM


Kathleen, perhaps it was the word "knoll" that drove me back to read this several times.  I had a revelation, it seems, of time, traveling, a there and then, here and now pull...of remembering, and a thinking of "yes, I have not forgotten..."

perhaps not what you intended, but indeed, what I gathered up...

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10 posted 2003-08-06 09:56 PM


ThisDiamond~
I took the same word-travel that Karilea did ... marking time remembered~

A lovely write of layering thoughts~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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