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0 posted 2003-08-06 11:16 AM



When

When I can’t face alone any more,
when I become isolation,
you come and sustain, fill me with
the gift of yourself, your presence.

When I am incomplete, wanting
beyond want, beyond reason,
you meld your soul with mine,
finish me, make me again whole.

When all the coals and fires etch into me,
turn to unquenchable need,
you quench by bringing me to white heat
and burn them all away.

When I must hear the horizon calling
with a voice I can’t shut out,
you comfort, call me to your own horizon,
your voice the call, the answer.

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2003-08-06 11:21 AM


wow, really beautiful..sounds like a spiritual significance has surrounded your being.  Wonderful happy write.  Thank you for sharing.
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2 posted 2003-08-06 11:30 AM


When I think I've read unsurpassable excellence from your pen, you do what I thought no one could... improve on even that high standard. *S* This is beautiful beyond words... and no less than you deserve, my friend. *S* A superb write... that fills me with happys you know this. *S*
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3 posted 2003-08-06 11:45 AM


Ed, this sounds like the ultimate peace indeed and I truly hope it is there for you
This did make me smile and a much needed smile indeed
thank you
xxoo

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4 posted 2003-08-06 11:45 AM


When I am incomplete, wanting
beyond want, beyond reason,
you meld your soul with mine,
finish me, make me again whole.

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*sigh*

When all the coals and fires etch into me,
turn to unquenchable need,
you quench by bringing me to white heat
and burn them all away.

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*WHEW*





(dittoing Ruth)

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

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5 posted 2003-08-06 11:47 AM


Dear Leader of the Rat World, I do believe this may be my favorite poem of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading. This is definitely a !!!

...There, it is now saved!


EA

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6 posted 2003-08-06 11:50 AM


Ed...I've got to agree with the other ladies...this is a heart stopper and sigh maker poem...written with passion and tenderness.  I love it!  
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7 posted 2003-08-06 01:13 PM


*sigh* :-) Love it

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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8 posted 2003-08-06 01:36 PM


SWOON !.!.!

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9 posted 2003-08-06 02:29 PM


ah, so this feeling still does exist and finds its way to exquisite words...nice write
Bill Charles
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10 posted 2003-08-06 02:38 PM


Ratleader - words of grace with this write. It's nice to know of the comfort...

BC

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11 posted 2003-08-06 04:17 PM


Oh this is so romantic with such vivid images. Loved it Maggie
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12 posted 2003-08-06 04:29 PM


Ed - great poetry with sooo much feeling - thanks - Paul
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13 posted 2003-08-06 10:44 PM



Keeps us coming back... very smooth

dale


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14 posted 2003-08-06 11:00 PM


I liked this. It reminds me of soemthing i cant quite put my finger on, and while thats goin on im swept up in the poem before i even notice. i like it.

The only difference between the creative and the conformists is that the creative will not be conquered and the conformists already are.

angelblueyes
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15 posted 2003-08-06 11:20 PM


This is definetly a heartstopper.I'm glad you've found this and hopeit lasts you a lifetime.
angelblueyes

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16 posted 2003-08-06 11:45 PM


this is really really romantic, you've went straight to the heart with this
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17 posted 2003-08-07 12:22 PM


I really needed to read you tonight, so tender....no real reason, but it made me cry.....hugssss you...


L~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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18 posted 2003-08-07 04:00 AM


had a sad tint to it, but overall comforting
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