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suthern

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0 posted 08-06-2003 05:34 AM

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Stasis appeals
Loss of a single second
Would sunder my heart.
But love and ponds
Become stagnant
For want of motion
So move with me
Abide in me
Coalesce body and spirit.
We'll live, progress
Share each lasting moment
Into the stillness
Of repletion
That yet hungers.

Kethry
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2 posted 08-06-2003 07:58 AM

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suthern,
so nice to see the face that matches the awesome words.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 08-06-2003 08:04 AM

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great write... enjoyed each word and the thought in itself

regards
sudhir

Janet Marie
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4 posted 08-06-2003 08:41 AM

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Stasis appeals
Loss of a single second
Would sunder my heart.
But love and ponds
Become stagnant
For want of motion
So move with me
Abide in me
Coalesce body and spirit.
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Whoa...what is in them pickles???

Ruth this is such a wonderful write..
Im loving free verse on your pen.
the vocab and phrasing in this is poetry in motion.
very very lovely poetess girlie.

( more please, said the insatiable moth)

"How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you."

LH

Ratleader

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6 posted 08-06-2003 09:30 AM

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Laura, this is so moving....

There are poems I don't like much, and poems I like very much.....and there are poems I wish I'd written. That's what kind this one is. A beautiful thought, beautifully told -- hold on to both, they're precious.

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Toerag
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8 posted 08-06-2003 10:09 AM

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Really well done...and a pic too now?...Is that with a Canon camera?....My pond that has no ripples has stagnated too...Good job gal

suthern

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10 posted 08-06-2003 12:07 PM

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Edder: You're so kind... and I thank you very much! *S*

Kethry: It's always nice to see your responses, lady... thank you! *S*

Sudhir: I'm so glad you enjoyed! *S* Thank you! *S*

JM: Now no profanity on a family site... so do not... repeat... do NOT mention that P word!!! LOL Thank you so much... I'm loving your reply! *S*

Lee J: I try not to. * S* Thank you so much!

Ratleader: Since you know I consider my pen insignificant compared with yours, I can't imagine a greater compliment... and I thank you ever so much! *S* And yes... I'm holding. *S*

Patricia: Thank you so much, kind lady. *S*

Toerag: Your pond stagnant??? Never! *G* I just won't believe that could happen. *S* Thank you so much, my friend... but nope... this was from the now dead Nikon... not my new toy. *S*

Susan: I don't (too cheap for premium cable *G*)... but I do thank you! *S*

serenity blaze
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11 posted 08-06-2003 01:04 PM

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Well, hello gorgeous!

love the pic.

and the poem, is different too, yes?

I like the tone of distance here--and yet, it's very intensely intimate.

hmmm...

and I'm pouting too, after seeing your pic.

(I feel so...inadequate...)

jellybeans
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13 posted 08-06-2003 02:09 PM

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well you know how I like free verse, so this reads wonderfully to me, but will also have to add that this is GREAT...ponds and love...wow what a thought, this will be added to my favorites of yours...would be hard pressed to just pick one, so I made a folder of them *smile*

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suthern

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14 posted 08-06-2003 05:07 PM

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serenity: YOU inadequate??? LOL That's not possible, gal... not in any way. *S* Thank you! *S*

Martie: Thank you, lady... very much. *S*

jellybeans: You read through kind eyes, my friend... and I do thank you! *S*

Cpat Hair

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15 posted 09-17-2003 04:06 PM

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So move with me
Abide in me
Coalesce body and spirit.
We'll live, progress
Share each lasting moment
Into the stillness
Of repletion
That yet hungers.
very nicely done my friend...

must have missed this one somewhere along the way...

Local Rebel
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17 posted 09-17-2003 10:15 PM

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yeah that hunger...

missed this the first go round -- glad somebody bumped it back..!

Magnus

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18 posted 09-17-2003 10:17 PM

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Suthern, a passionate yearning write that
aches with want. Very well expressed.
Yes indeed.

suthern

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19 posted 09-18-2003 10:55 AM

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Cpat: You know you've given a smile, right? *S* Thank you very much! *S*

vandana: I'm glad... thank you! *S*

LR: I was rather shocked to see it resurrected. LOL Thank you, nephew dear. *S*

Magnus: Thank you very much, kind sir... your words are greatly appreciated. *S*

Earth Angel
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21 posted 09-18-2003 03:21 PM

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"Coalesce body and spirit."

~ and what a beautiful thing that be!

Marge Tindal

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22 posted 09-18-2003 03:27 PM

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DarlingLady~
You are soooooooooooo talented~
This is superb penning~
Love ya' ... love your POND-ering~
*Huglets*
~*Me*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Pilgrimage
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23 posted 09-18-2003 04:58 PM

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You have to keep the hungry going. Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

suthern

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24 posted 09-19-2003 09:16 AM

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Midnitesun: Thank you so much, my friend. *S*

EA: Yes... *S* Makes a person believe in heaven on earth. *S* Thank you very much! *S*

Marge: Such words from a lady with your talent touch me deeply... I thank you! *S*

Pilgrimage: Yes, indeed. *S* Thank you very much! *S*

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