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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-08-06 01:27 AM



Mine

do I have
the courage deep
just to lay my heart
at your feet
a whisper to be
a secret sound
bounce of wall
an echo found
these drops of who
I am in drip
my skin falls away
unzip
what is this
so much that I fear
in saying words that
make it all disappear
my voice said it
and it made me nude
where is my cover
lost to include
tender hands
touch so unkind
as I go on
as it all unwinds
loud ticking
ringing in time
shall this ever
ever be mine



"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (08-06-2003 02:53 AM).]

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Kaoru
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1 posted 2003-08-06 01:53 AM


It echos..deeply..
haunting and desperate..

Ericc
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2 posted 2003-08-06 07:39 AM


This is outstanding...deep and poignant.
Eric

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2003-08-06 07:45 AM


enjoyed this write, and mostly this part:

what is this
so much that I fear
in saying words that
make it all disappear
my voice said it
and it made me nude
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regards
sudhir

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4 posted 2003-08-06 01:43 PM


I know the caution, h.

scary, but worth it, I think.


Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-08-06 01:53 PM


"do I have
the courage deep
just to lay my heart
at your feet"

deeply felt...

Susan C.

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