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Deja Vu
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Deja Vu |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Wake up tomorrow toss the gravel from shoe walk cleaner further away from where heel got caught I don't miss you Beside me sometimes holding my hand you werent aware we were touching anymore It doesn't hurt like it used to Without snap or click you have passed by numb circling overhead gone waiting for word to drop me from height I know it'll hurt again. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yep, deju vu, all over again, and again and again,,,,,, why does the hurt stick and the sweet stuff fly so fast as we try to savor it.......... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you have passed my numb..sooo good I love reading you *s M |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
amazing write....your one of the poets i look for now...great job  riley * the pouring rain kisses my lips with innocence as you look into my eyes * |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
walking down gravel roads... will find rocks in your shoes maybe barefoot... hmmmm nice and painful Gemma |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You have such a sense of emotional detail. Great writing. Eric |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
At first I thought you were going to say something about the "shake the dust off your feet" and never look back, but not so. I see now. It was about that repeat that never seems to find it's way out of town. It hangs around like that guest you hear about the host wishes would go home. I think anyway. SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Deja "TWO"? Sounds like a romantic weekend in Paris ... I'll be on the next cloud out of here!!  |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
C'mon, Gem.. Let's empty our shoes.. Great write, going in my library yet again. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
another treasure...you never disappoint me...h |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"It doesn't hurt as much as it used to."--hold that thought, Dear Gem Dust!   LL |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
ironically for me i just went thru that tonight...good emotional piece I feel rain pouring down. I wait to rot away, |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write,,, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I know this well....too well...excellent emote as always. Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"I know it'll hurt again." *sigh* you'd think the knowledge would make it easier to handle, wouldn't you? I wish it were so...  It's hard to grow up and watch your friends remain in the same mindset that you left them in |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It may hurt but not as long and not as often...James |
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ambrish Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 257India |
a lovely poem |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
It doesn't hurt as much as it used to until it hurts again...yep. Exactly. Susan C. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Gem- I do know how this feels. you express it very well. insanity is not a crime |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Gem - this one stanza . . . Beside me sometimes holding my hand you werent aware we were touching anymore God so insightful . . . so very true sadly xxoo |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Nice write |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
and no matter HOW much we know that it's going to hurt again, we are never prepared for it when it happens... good job Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great Writing Andy |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Thankyou For each one of your replies, really does make me feel better. Thanks for understanding. Love you guys.  Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
personally, i say you beat him with the shoe or at least wing it at his head |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
gemjop, i hope that as time passes, the pain will fade away. "Due to budget cuts, the light at the end of the tunnel, has been turned off" author unknown |
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