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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada 
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i want to believe you and every word you say to me about love freedom independence but i can't are you really being true to me to yourself? i wonder sometimes if you even know who you are you're beautifull and passionate your words fill me with hope but tell me, how can i let someone tell me who i am and who i should be if they don't even know themselves.... "so kiss me hard cause this will be the last time that i let you."-D.C [This message has been edited by exhale (08-05-2003 07:08 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I like this poem..its sort of musical. since you encourage critiques and all..i think I'd enjoy it more if you went back and checked your spelling. I think simple errors make it seem like you rushed through this. but over all a good poem  insanity is not a crime |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
good question... *s M |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I like the way you show that some people use others as a mirror for themselves and they never quite know how they should be. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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