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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2003-08-05 06:10 PM


I am because I was,
because I was I am,
it behoves me not to know
the beginning or the end.  

I am because I was
taken, led, and coerced
down the rocky road
into the depths of you.

Because I was I am
the spirit of your love
the water of your tears
the bearer of your pain.

I am because I was
allowed to walk with thee
see mountains, rivers, sunsets
and feel as one with them.

Because I was I am
no longer who I was!


© Copyright 2003 Helen - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2003-08-05 07:28 PM


well this one made me say it over and over almost like a tongue twister, Helen *s
I am glad you are who you are even if  you are ever changing.

hugss
M


icebox
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2 posted 2003-08-05 11:31 PM


A marvelous poetic chant!  Thank you.
Honeybunch
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3 posted 2003-08-06 12:01 PM


Hi there "M"!  More like a "life" twister, me thinks.     Thanks for the read.

Hello, Icebox, ... and who says I can't sing, huh??  Well, a chant is half way there I guess.  Take care.  

Martie
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4 posted 2003-08-06 11:47 AM


Honeybunch

"I am because I was,
because I was I am,"

Continuance is a circle, not a straight line, I think, otherwise how could this be true?  I enjoyed this pondering.

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2003-08-06 12:45 PM


"I am because I was,
because I was I am,
it behoves me not to know
the beginning or the end."

Oh my..isn't that the truth??  

This..was..amazing.  

Susan C.  

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6 posted 2003-08-06 12:49 PM


I really liked the rhythm to this.  Neat!

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2003-08-06 02:06 PM


Hi, Martie, Susan and KristieSue - Thank you all for reading.  Your comments are greatly appreciated.  
Bill Charles
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8 posted 2003-08-06 02:57 PM


Honeybunch - excellent use of words, and great write...

BC

Honeybunch
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9 posted 2003-08-06 07:12 PM


Thank you, BC.  I guess it's called going around in circles.
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10 posted 2003-08-07 11:27 PM


I like this....a good use of progression, and it speaks the absolute truth.

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Honeybunch
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11 posted 2003-08-08 06:20 AM


Thank you, Ratleader.  Oh yes, the "truth" - what is truth without some proof?
Ratleader
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12 posted 2003-08-10 04:14 PM


They say the opposite of love is not hate, but fear. So, complete love means a there is no fear. That may not equal trust, but it's something parallel with it....and if you trust, there's no need of proof.

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Honeybunch
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13 posted 2003-08-10 06:28 PM


Thank you, Ratleader.  Yes, you are absolutely right!
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