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0 posted 2003-08-04 12:24 PM



Clown Strip

Sometimes this life thing
is something to watch
with morbid fascination
like a clown striptease....

Feel the bounce,
Whizzo up there humping
the pole, sweat drooping off
the polka dot moustache
and the tips of the
floppy shoes
wagging circles to the beat
while the wagon wheel hat dips
like a jellyfish under the spell
of that feral slide trombone....

.....until the motley’s off, and
oh, man, why did I come?

...and will I ever again?

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-08-04 12:25 PM


Oh good, it's technically a new day, so I can post more of this.......

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2 posted 2003-08-04 12:27 PM


ed...i don't like this ride either...lets get off and go get some taffy...h
Kahlil
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3 posted 2003-08-04 01:48 AM


Wow, this is WILD!!!  One more time!  :-)
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4 posted 2003-08-04 02:31 AM



I got off on the lines...

sweat drooping off
the polka dot moustache
and the tips of the
floppy shoes

I could actually see this.
your not on a quota are ya Ed
I hope not. You could put a
smile in anybodies day.

dale


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5 posted 2003-08-04 11:43 AM


Ed...I know that clowns are supposed to make you laugh, but they always made me sad...being someone else then who they were.  It might be interesting to see a clown strip down to his real humanness...huh?  
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6 posted 2003-08-04 11:48 AM


More for you than me in this particular case, I think....guys can leave all on -- including clowns!

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LeeJ
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7 posted 2003-08-04 12:45 PM


Sometimes this life thing
is something to watch
with morbid fascination
like a clown striptease....

your reads are so incredible...very much enjoyed this one...thank you for sharing

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8 posted 2003-08-04 01:08 PM


Sometimes this life thing
is something to watch
with morbid fascination
like a clown striptease....

And watching through your eyes is a treat. *S*

You paint such a vivid picture that we can smell the grease paint and sweat... hear the slide of the trombone and the flap of the shoes. And you flavor the frenzy with a wistfulness that reminds us of so many things that colored our lives... that only come again in memories. *S*

Excellent work, my friend... one I'll enjoy reading again and again. *S*

[This message has been edited by suthern (08-04-2003 01:09 PM).]

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