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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2003-08-02 03:47 PM


Midnight rendevous
Soul searching
Exposed naked
Beneath the stars
Heart aching
Hungry for something more
Your touch
Would be nice
Your kiss
Wet
Against my mouth
Alas, I only
Hold you in dreams
You left me
Kissing a shadow
Beneath the moonlight
Tears caught somewhere
Between space and time
I'm trapped within
this fragile state of mind
It's time
I just know it's time
To let the waves
of disappointment
Come crashing
Over me again
Tiny specks of emotion
Nestle deep
Within these open wounds
That never seem to quite heal
Despite the fact
I haven't really
Given your memory
The time of day
That's only when I'm awake
Yet
Unfortunately
When I close my eyes
That's when
I
love you again...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2003 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2003-08-02 03:56 PM


Achingly beautiful.
Love, Margherita

Janette
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2 posted 2003-08-02 06:11 PM


"Despite the fact
I haven't really
Given your memory
The time of day"

Ahhhh yes, the haunting in your dreams ... I know this feeling well at times ... mercy.

Enjoyed

Sunshine
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3 posted 2003-08-02 06:34 PM


You left me
Kissing a shadow
Beneath the moonlight

~*~

so heartbreaking...
so poignant...

Kethry
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4 posted 2003-08-02 08:18 PM


Sometimes our subconscious knows us better than we know ourselves. Heartwrenching and beautiful.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



littlewing
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5 posted 2003-08-02 11:09 PM


Jesus you write beautifully
this made my heart ache
but in a good way
*wink*
xxoo

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
6 posted 2003-08-03 02:41 PM


s'why i can't sleep..
ctowen
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7 posted 2003-08-03 02:46 PM


I try to sleep with one eye open...


     ... sometimes it helps.

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2003-08-03 02:58 PM


"You left me
Kissing a shadow
Tears caught somewhere
Between space and time"

Kris, you wrote the words that I could not....but, fortunately time has healed the wounds.

Lovin' healin' hugs,
Linda

Gabriel Frost
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Between midnight thoughts
9 posted 2003-08-03 03:05 PM


like a crystal...set in stone..
gemjop
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10 posted 2003-08-03 07:10 PM


It's time
I just know it's time
To let the waves
of disappointment
Come crashing
Over me again
Tiny specks of emotion
Nestle deep
Within these open wounds
That never seem to quite heal

Kris, and you say you want to know what feeds MY muse...wow, maybe we have the same thing..a worthless man?

Into my library gal.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

eor
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blues & greys
11 posted 2003-08-03 08:44 PM


"I just know it's time
To let the waves
of disappointment
Come crashing
Over me again"

-beautiful

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Wind
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12 posted 2003-08-03 08:46 PM


fabulous. however that is spelled

insanity is not a crime

Ceinwyn
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13 posted 2003-08-03 08:47 PM


Guys thanks...really really appreciate your responses... haha this is why god invented nightlights,eh!? better yet..vodka...j/k

lots of these xxx and some of these ooo,
Kris


If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (08-03-2003 08:49 PM).]

Patricia
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14 posted 2003-08-03 08:49 PM


And with your final word, a collective sigh of the many I held with my read of this.  This is incredible and touched my heart...

Patricia

passing shadows
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15 posted 2003-08-04 12:54 PM


yeah...sigh

damn

Kaoru
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16 posted 2003-08-04 12:57 PM


Tiny specks of emotion
Nestle deep
Within these open wounds
That never seem to quite heal
Despite the fact
I haven't really
Given your memory
The time of day


Great lines, all throughout this..

scuffedshoe2
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17 posted 2003-08-04 01:04 AM


Pretty, and to the point.

-Ian

Skyfire
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18 posted 2003-08-04 01:14 AM


Big

it's unfortunate that you're feeling this, but I do take comfort that I'm not the only one in the world who feels like this...

Beautiful, thank you so much for sharing this

It's hard to grow up and watch your friends remain in the same mindset that you left them in

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