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0 posted 2003-08-01 10:01 PM



Time Rider

see him ride, ride,
no oasis in sight,
no calm-leaved arboretum
and no breath of singing lips,
no fruit of welcome,
only ride, ride,
dancing to the shear of time
the desperado call
from over the next rise
where he will find
no passage, no turning,
no hopeful eyes
to hold him still
and then no calm,
no moist and yearning
garden where
to lay him down forever;
see him ride, ride,
no oasis in sight...

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-08-01 10:13 PM


dancing to the shear of time''

Id love to dance that way, this brings such a peace.....


Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

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2 posted 2003-08-01 11:01 PM


Ed...time is not always a friend, while it rides and rides, sweet feelings stays and stay.  
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3 posted 2003-08-01 11:36 PM


I have seen this spirit, and I have wondered of the cold and shallow...
Many meanings here...well done. TD

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4 posted 2003-08-02 10:44 AM


Wow...this is deeply stirring.
Eric

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5 posted 2003-08-02 10:44 AM


"dancing to the shear of time"

I agree ... this line just struck me ... wow!

Great read here.

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6 posted 2003-08-02 12:15 PM


Ed - great poem here - loved riding with it - Paul
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7 posted 2003-08-02 11:59 PM


Truth is, I'm not sure why I write poems like this.....folks who like my poetry mostly don't like this kind, though I do.

If I write one like this, or THIS, /pip/Forum64/HTML/001120.html it's guaranteed to take the plunge, even though it may be something I truly like.... but it seems I have to get 'em out of my system from time to time......

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8 posted 2003-08-03 08:27 AM


I like the idea of riding through time. Very good write. Maggie
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9 posted 2003-08-03 10:45 PM


The tension that coils through this is palpable... an excellent write! *S*

When no respite is in sight, I hope you find one within. *S*

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