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Open Poetry #27

The Great North Woods

B3jamboree
Junior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 33
Michigan

0 posted 2003-07-31 09:39 AM

Last night in the great north woods
Spirits rustled tree tops
Medicine men and warriors
In the virgin pines
Lumbermen and killers
In the rows of neatly planted trees

3:00 AM in the great north town
Only police drive streets
I passed two driving to walmart
To get some cough syrup
To help me sleep
Great north nights without sleep

Great north nights without sleep
Only stars keep company
The moon and the stars
And the streets lead me on
Don't feel much like talking
No use talking to stars anyway
Or streets

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2003-07-31 02:27 PM

You have some good strong titles, and always start out from a strong position poetically...
If I might, I would like to suggest a spell check before you post your stuff...everyone has made a typo...but it does take the read off track, and you deserve better.
You caught my attention with your last write, and I read your site.
Smoothing the edges of the thoughts might help communicate more powerfully what you feel and see...I don't mean soften the context, just the delivery...
You do have great talent for writing from the heart what most men can never say.
TD

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

2 posted 2003-07-31 02:41 PM

I find this to be a wonderful write!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-07-31 03:14 PM

Very well done!
I love northern Michigan!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
Has held me in the same embrace~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-07-31 03:56 PM

I know we need lumber, but it tears my heart out when I see a tree being cut down. Clear-cutting is tantamount to genocide! I swear I can hear the screams of trees as they are being felled. I was raised in Northern Ontario and I witnessed a lot of "massacres"!

Powerful poem. I especially felt the first stanza.

Earth Angel

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