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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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we followed your hypothesis, but something just won't mix listen to you talk.. I hear nothing but an endless lecture Add you, subtract time, subtract sanity... what have I got left? Science is confusing, And I'm no scientist This experiment's gone horribly wrong, things aren't adding up. my head tells me to move on: Start over, rewind, undo..there's a million ways to say it, no way to do it. I lay awake and wonder were we went wrong. And it hits me the formula for happiness- subtract you, add me: now we're getting somewhere. Sorry- chemistry just aint my thing insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (07-30-2003 09:26 PM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Loved it...especially the last several lines...yes! jwesley |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh WOW!! Love this Liz! Amazing talent....oooh yes! ~Hugs little one~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
the formula for happiness- subtract you, add me: now we're getting somewhere. l*ved that and the best chemistry happens naturally |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Amazing young poetess you are Wind !! hugs to you for this, Chris  |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
jwesly- thanks, those were the lines I based the poem on..groan..I've been listening to incubus too long Nancy- thank you very much Raph- lol..I L*ve ya too  heh..chemistry just don't happen at all sometimes. Chris- missed ya, you are quite amazing yourself insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (07-30-2003 09:46 PM).] |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
A- mazing....that's what it is. Amazing!!  Wow you are so young and yet so wise. Amazed, as Always with your writes!!  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ah know liz..i'm chemically challenged..or imbalanced..a little from column a a little from column b |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Thank you Shararose.. Raph- i L*ve ya anyhow  ..sigh..speaking of chemicaly imbalenced..wonder were gumdrop is..and all the rest of the insomniacsinsanity is not a crime |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
lmao @ Raph L*VE this formula...and hey aren't we all imbalanced  *whistles innocently* If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thanks..errm..you. heh. (don't think we will get away with the astricks for long...the rules find them just as bad as actualy spelling out the word. oh well...) l*ve ya chemical are dangerous..science sucks...who cares about math anyhow? insanity is not a crime [This message has been edited by Wind (07-30-2003 10:21 PM).] |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was great.An amazing write. angelblueyes |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent write Liz, you got it right! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yep, Little friend, that's the way it is. Hey, I just remembered...I still haven't posted that "Wind Rictameter", or the "Raph Rictameter" that I wrote for you two. I've been doing theose challenges, and had forgot about those two. Well, I'll post them one day for ya'll.  Hugs  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-31-2003 02:29 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wind, I always love your writing, this in particular strummed a familiar chord in me. Thank you for this |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
"my head tells me to move on: Start over, rewind, undo..there's a million ways to say it, no way to do it." I really liked these lines... Another excellent poem, Liz. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz, I cannot imagine you at twenty . . . Good God . . . I was never very good at chem either . . . xxoo |
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Christina24rb Junior Member
since 2003-07-25
Posts 13Georgia |
very nice creative and original! |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
angelblueyes- thank you for the sweet reply passing shadows-allways nice to hear from you garysgirl-lol..the challenges are time consuming...heh..sure we'll both love them Kaoru- thanks Meg..glad you can relate when i cannot El_Campeador- glad you liked those lines littlewing-that wont be for a while..lol Christina24rb- thank you and welcome insanity is not a crime |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
God, cant you just write something bad, so i've got something interesting to say? you really do get better, and my favourites of yours change with every new write. this has grit n intelligence. it is so you. gonna go read this one again. me likessssss. p.s as for your mum and george. she was insane, but quite sensible i suppose. i bet she regrets that bigtime! siggggghhhhhh. I'd have fainted. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
undo..there's a million ways to say it, no way to do it. love it just an all round wonderful write Liz...you sure you aren't an older person in a young body? M |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Gem- no, i think she was just insane... nakdthoughts-  one never knows insanity is not a crime (eek!..that's not my icon  )[This message has been edited by Wind (07-31-2003 12:13 PM).] |
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